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Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course in university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. How far do you agree or disagree with the above views? Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course in university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. How far with the above views? Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. 6YRj
It is probably true to say that most people believe that a university degree is the only way to get a good job. I think this is true in certain areas, while in other areas, a degree is not as useful. To begin with, many people have ambitions to become a qualified professional, and there is no doubt that becoming a doctor o lawyer, for example, is only possible with a degree. Another advantage of graduating from university is that it gives you more choices when it comes to choosing a job. Most employers will be more impressed by a candidate who has a degree than they would be by one who only has high school qualification because it shows a certain level of intelligence and education, as well as the commitment and self-discipline that is needed in order to study a degree course for three or four years. On the other hand, there might be some benefit to starting your career early, especially if your chosen field is one which does not typically require a university education. This would apply to somebody who wants to be a car mechanic, or a fashion designer, for instance, who would not necessary gain anything from going to university. The hands-on experience you gain in your job while others are studying for a degree can give you a distinct advantage. I once read about a man who left school at sixteen and went on to become a wealthy and successful investment broker. He claimed that he had learned all he needed to know by working in his chosen field and he could not have done any better by getting a degree. So, to conclude, it is possible to get a good job without to university. Having said that, some professions, such as the law, require you to have a degree and as stated above a university degree could potentially open more doors when looking for a job.
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this is true in certain areas, while in other areas, a
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is not as useful.

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have ambitions to become a qualified professional, and there is no doubt that becoming a doctor o lawyer,
for example
, is
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only
possible with a
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degree
. Another advantage of graduating from
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university
is that it gives you more choices when it
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comes
to choosing a
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. Most employers will be more impressed by a candidate
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has a
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degree
than they would be by one
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has high school qualification
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a certain level of intelligence and education,
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course for three or four years.

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, there might be
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benefit to starting your career early,
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typically
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education. This would apply to somebody
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who
wants to be a car mechanic, or a fashion designer,
for instance
,
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would not
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necessary
gain anything from going to
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university
. The hands-on experience you gain in your
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job
while others are studying for a
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degree
can give you a distinct advantage. I once read about a
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man
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who
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left
school at sixteen and went on to become a wealthy and successful investment broker. He claimed that he had learned all he needed to know by working in his chosen
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field and
he could not have done any better by getting a degree.

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,
to conclude
, it is possible to
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a
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good
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job
without to
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university
. Having said that,
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some
professions, such as the law, require you to have a
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degree
and as stated above a
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university
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degree
could
potentially
open more doors when looking for a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
.
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IELTS essay Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course in university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. How far with the above views? Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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