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Advance in technology and automation have reduced the need for manual labour. Therefore, working hours should be reduced. To what extent do you agree with this statement

Advance in technology and automation have reduced the need for manual labour. Therefore, working hours should be reduced. To what extent E82Q
Nowadays, less time is required in job and it is as a result of advancement improvement of technology and automation. This essay will discuss my view in supporting the idea. To begin with, in this era of advanced technology, less workers are required. for instance, before this time, much people were needed to work and as well time consuming which then places the health of the workers in serious risk. Like in factories, much people could be employed for sealing and packaging of products, but since the invention of machines, this has drastically reduced load load, involves less work and saves time also enhances increased work done. Furthermore, its makes the labourers enjoy working and as well helps the employers retain their workers. In view of this, i agree with the opinion and will explain why in this essay. Inaddition, technological invention and innovation creates time for workers. For example, it is said that all work without place makes the jack a dull boy. When time is created for workers, it gives them time to take care of families, visit friends and loved ones, recreational centers, all these reliefs psychological stress and social status thereby, improve health. Statistics have shown that over 50% of labourers lost their families relating to lack of attention. Saying all above, i do understand that there are negative aspects affecting workers as it regards technology and automation. For instance, due to reduction of hours, it will equally reduce salary in turn affect financial condition of the employees and families. Furthermore, there will be increase lost of job also people with lower educational qualification or without experience might face difficulties getting job in company using sophisticated work process. In my opinion, i agree that advanced in technology and automation brought decrease in labour market.
Nowadays, less
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technology
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with, in this era of advanced
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technology
,
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less
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workers
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for
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before
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time
, much
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people
were needed
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work
and
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time consuming
which then places the health of the
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workers
in serious
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risk
. Like in factories, much
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people
could
be employed
for sealing and packaging of products,
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but
since the invention of machines, this has
drastically
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reduced
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, involves less
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work
and saves
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time
also
enhances increased
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done.
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, its
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makes
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labourers
enjoy working and
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helps
the employers retain their
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workers
. In view of this,
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Inaddition
, technological invention and innovation creates
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for
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.
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, it
is said
that all
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without place
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makes
the jack a dull boy. When
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time
is created
for
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workers
, it gives them
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time
to take care of families, visit friends and
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loved
ones, recreational centers, all these reliefs psychological
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stress
and social status thereby,
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improve
health. Statistics have shown that over 50% of
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labourers
lost their families relating to lack of attention. Saying all above,
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i
do understand that there are
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negative
aspects affecting
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workers
as it regards
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technology
and automation.
For instance
, due to reduction of hours, it will
equally
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reduce
salary in turn affect financial condition of the employees and families.
Furthermore
, there will be increase lost of job
also
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people
with lower educational qualification or without experience might face difficulties getting job in
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company
using sophisticated
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work
process. In my opinion,
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i
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agree
that advanced in
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technology
and automation brought decrease in
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labour
market.
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IELTS essay Advance in technology and automation have reduced the need for manual labour. Therefore, working hours should be reduced. To what extent

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