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Many people believe that women make better parents than men and that this is why they have a greater role in raising children in most societies. Others claim that men are just as good as women at parenting. Write an essay expressing your point of view. Give reasons for your answer.

Many people believe that women make better parents than men and that this is why they have a greater role in raising children in most societies. Others claim that men are just as good as women at parenting. Write an essay expressing your point of view. 3aY7Y
In order to be a great human being in future, a child should be raised with great moral standards at home. The topic whether women or men get a major role in raising the children is a huge debate nowadays. I think both of the parents share equal credit in raising kids. Let’s ponder on the advantages on both sides. Primarily, women are often treated as great caretakers and also the one for great future of the kids. Children spend a major chunk of their time with their mums. So, women get to teach kids on how to be a better person in the society and also on how to be a great human being. She provides nutritious foods to the children which help them to become healthy. Children learn about how to take care of others from their mums because mothers always take good care of their children. This instils a great sense of responsibility in the children. Secondarily, men (father) are termed as their ideal person for children. Men always struggle so much in order to win bread for the family. This struggle teaches kids to study better with a dream to help the family financially in future. Fathers are often a source of inspiration for children on how to be a strong and better person in life. This helps them to grow as better and responsible citizens in future. After looking at advantages from both sides of the argument, I conclude that both men and women share equal proportion in raising the children. Even if the proportion is not balanced, there will be a huge impact on the children. So both father and mothers hold a major role in the family.
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moral standards at home. The topic whether
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women
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men
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a major role in raising the
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children
is a huge debate nowadays. I
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think
both of the parents share equal credit in raising
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kids
.
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’s ponder on the advantages on both sides.

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women
are
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treated as
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great
caretakers and
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the one for
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future of the
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kids
.
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spend a major chunk of their time with their
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mums
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women
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get
to teach
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kids
on how to be a
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better
person in the society and
also
on how to be a
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great
human being. She provides nutritious foods to the
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children
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help
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Children
learn about how to take care of others from their
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mums
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because
mothers always take
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care of their
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sense of responsibility in the children.

Secondarily
,
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men
(father)
are termed
as their ideal person for
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children
.
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Men
always struggle
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much in order to win bread for the family. This struggle teaches
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kids
to study
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with a dream to
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help
the family
financially
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in future
. Fathers are
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often
a source of inspiration for
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children
on how to be a strong and
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better
person in life. This
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helps
them to grow as
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better
and responsible citizens
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in future
.

After looking at advantages from both sides of the argument, I conclude that both
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men
and
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women
share equal proportion in raising the
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children
. Even if the proportion is not balanced, there will be a huge impact on the
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children
.
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both father and mothers hold a major role in the family.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that women make better parents than men and that this is why they have a greater role in raising children in most societies. Others claim that men are just as good as women at parenting. Write an essay expressing your point of view.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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