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Many people believe that the high levels of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. What are these problems and how could they be reduced?

Many people believe that the high levels of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. What are these problems and how could they be reduced? kY5RW
Nowadays, films are a major source of entertainment and violent movies are loved by all. A number of people think that extremely violent movies are creating nuisance in the society. I concur with the notion due to the fact that these movies are inspiring the adults to act violently and encouraging aggressive behaviour against women. In order to curb the menace the stakeholders of the movie should stop showing such acts as heroic and people below 21 years of age must be refrained from watching such movies. Violent movies has caused disturbance in the society in many-fold ways. Firstly, teenage and adult minds are inspired by the action sequences shot in the movies. Reports, suggest that their minds are not completely developed to understand the aftermath of such scenarios and movies are silent on consequences of such acts, for instance, a boy aged 18, once dug a tunnel to the central jail of New York to rescue his brother; however, he failed and the police nabbed him. Later, the boy revealed that he was inspired by a movie name 'Unstoppable'. Further, teenage minds are inspired by movies based on toxic masculinity which promotes aggressiveness in men as heroic and the shots from the movie where the male lead slaps, hurl abuses and yet marries his female lead is presented as love has sabotaged these minds. Consequently, a surge in the number of violent activities against girls aged below 18 was observed. Although script writing is a beautiful art that should never be judged, as soon as repercussions are apparent, strict actions can be brought in place. Foremost, producers must themselves assess whether their production can have serious implications on the society, if yes, then a message should be conveyed to not to reiterate any such acts in reality as movies are just fictions and far from reality. In addition, film censor boards must keep a vigil eye on all such cinematic platforms either online platforms or cinema halls. People who are not 21 years of age must not be allowed to watch such movies. Moreover, parental controls must be introduced in online platforms so that parents know what their children watch and can restrict the availability of such content to their children.
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movies
are
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loved
by all. A number of
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people
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think
that
extremely
violent
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movies
are creating nuisance in the society. I concur with the notion due to the fact that these
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movies
are inspiring the adults to
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act
violently
and encouraging aggressive
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behaviour
against women. In order to curb the menace the stakeholders of the
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movie
should
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stop
showing such
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acts
as heroic and
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people
below 21 years of age
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must
be refrained
from watching such movies.

Violent
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movies
has caused disturbance in the society in
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many
-fold ways.
Firstly
, teenage and adult
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minds
are inspired
by the action sequences shot in the
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movies
. Reports, suggest that their
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minds
are not completely developed to understand the aftermath of such scenarios and
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movies
are silent on consequences of such
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acts
,
for instance
, a boy aged 18, once dug a tunnel to the central jail of New York to rescue his brother;
however
, he failed and the police nabbed him. Later, the boy revealed that he
was inspired
by a
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movie
name 'Unstoppable'.
Further
, teenage
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minds
are inspired
by
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movies
based on toxic masculinity which promotes aggressiveness in
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men
as heroic and the shots from the
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movie
where the male lead slaps, hurl abuses and
yet
marries his female lead
is presented
as
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love
has sabotaged these
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minds
.
Consequently
, a surge in the number of violent activities against girls aged below 18
was observed
.

Although script writing is a
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beautiful
art that should never
be judged
, as
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soon
as repercussions are apparent, strict actions can
be brought
in place. Foremost, producers
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must
themselves assess whether their production can have serious implications on the society, if yes, then a message should
be conveyed
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to not to
reiterate any such
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acts
in reality as
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movies
are
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just
fictions and far from reality.
In addition
, film censor boards
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must
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keep
a vigil eye on all such cinematic platforms either online platforms or cinema halls.
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People
who are not 21 years of age
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must
not be
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allowed
to
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watch
such
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movies
.
Moreover
, parental controls
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must
be introduced
in online platforms
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so
that parents know what their children
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watch
and can restrict the availability of such content to their children.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that the high levels of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. What are these problems and how could they be reduced?

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