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Many people believe that social netwroking sites such as facebook, have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

Since the beginiing of digital era, humans have deleterious effects of social media and they socialize less in public and more on the internet. In this essay, I will strongly agree with this statement. Firstly, I will discuss the privacy and time-wasting habits of people using social platforms and secondly, I will explore how a young child can get brainwashed using the digital arena of socialising. Although, a decade ago, letters and postcards were in huge demand for contacting a person. However, in this epoch, digitalization of processes has certainly helped in contacting any human from any part of the world. For this arrangement, many big corpoaration have setup their high-end technologies to store and use the types of data humans share and communicate about on their websites. Installing any digital application permission to manage calls, see the gallery and access to texts should be provided by the user and thereby using a particular user's data, companies pitch them a product which they would like to buy. This scheme is known as behaviourial marketing strategy and is used by major companies which have huge subscriber base and do not care about a person's privacy. Not only these applications are designed to make people's life more involved on the internet, these application do help students take time off from their responsibilties and get addicted to using digital platforms a lot more than playing or studying. Therefore, using these sites can cause priority-destabilisation. Similarly, more baised and negative news/false news could make a not so knowledgeable person believe things that are not true and therefore could lead to a negative impact. Also, people tend to read more from public pages on these platforms rather than a newspaper and absolutely disregard the genuine and trustworthy sources. A classic exmple of this is use of Facebook in campaigning and win of Donald Trump in 2016 USA elections. Although, the opposition in democratic party had all the positive aspect of winning but by spreading fake agenda digitally like, 'Build a wall on the border of Mexico' certainly biased the un-knowledgeable and young people of the USA. In conclusion, people should realize the importance of time they spend on such digital platforms as soicializing face-to-face does help a person better understand and represent their true side, while priorities of other work like jobs and studies should also not get affected.
Since the
beginiing
of digital era, humans have deleterious effects of social
media and
they socialize less in public and more on the internet.

In this essay, I will
strongly
agree
with this statement.

Firstly
, I will discuss the privacy and time-wasting habits of
people
using social
platforms
and
secondly
,

I will explore how a young child can
get
brainwashed using the digital arena of
socialising
.

Although, a decade ago, letters and postcards were in huge demand for contacting a person.

However
, in this epoch, digitalization of processes has
certainly
helped
in contacting any human from any part of the world.

For this arrangement,
many
big
corpoaration
have
setup
their high-
end
technologies to store and
use
the types of data humans share and communicate about on their websites.

Installing any digital application permission to manage calls,
see
the gallery and access to texts should
be provided
by the user and thereby

using
a particular user's data,
companies
pitch them a product which they would like to
buy
.

This scheme
is known
as
behaviourial
marketing strategy and is
used
by major
companies
which have huge subscriber base and do not care about a person's privacy.

Not
only
these applications
are designed
to
make
people
's life more involved on the internet,

these application
do
help
students take time off from their
responsibilties
and

get
addicted to using digital
platforms
a lot more than playing or studying.
Therefore
, using these sites can cause
priority-destabilisation
.

Similarly
, more
baised
and
negative
news/false news could
make
a not
so
knowledgeable person believe things that are not true and
therefore
could lead to a

negative
impact.

Also
,
people
tend to read more from public pages on these
platforms
rather
than a newspaper and
absolutely
disregard the genuine and trustworthy sources.

A classic
exmple
of this is
use
of Facebook in campaigning and win of Donald Trump in 2016 USA elections.

Although
, the opposition in
democratic party
had all the
positive
aspect of winning

but
by spreading fake agenda
digitally
like, 'Build a wall on the border of Mexico'
certainly
biased the
un-knowledgeable
and young
people
of the USA.

In conclusion
,
people
should realize the importance of time they spend on such digital
platforms
as
soicializing
face-to-face does
help
a person better

understand
and represent their true side, while priorities of other work like jobs and studies should
also
not
get
affected
.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that social netwroking sites such as facebook, have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.

Essay
  American English
21 paragraphs
394 words
5.5
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