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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. bdeP
OFTEN GOVERNMENTS ARE ARGUING THAT THE ECONOMY IS MORE ADVANTAGEOUS AIM FOR THE COUNTRY PROGRESS, WHEREAS FEW CITIZEN EXPRESSING THEIR CONCERN TO OTHER STREAM ALSO SHOULD GIVE EQUAL IMPORTANT. IN THE BELOW ESSAY I AM GOING TO DESCRIBE BOTH THE VIEWS. FIRSTLY, I BELIEVE THAT MANUFACTURING IS VERY IMPORTANT FOR THE COUNTRIES' GROWTH. WITH THE HELP OF MANUFACTURING, GROSS DOMESTIC PRODUCT (GDP) AND PER CAPITA ARE CALCULATE. GDP SHOWS THE PRODUCT POTENTIAL AND FINANCIAL STATUS OF THE COUNTRY. FOR INSTANCE, IF COUNTRY PRODUCE A VARIOUS PRODUCTS IT SHOWS THE NATIONS' MANUFACTURING ABILITY. DUE TO THAT LOTS OF MEMBERS ARE GETTING JOBS AND ALSO PRODUCT OF MANUFACTURING GIVES COMFORT TO THE PEOPLE. MOREOVER, IT USE TO ROTATES THE MONEY WITH BUYING AND SELLING OF PRODUCED PRODUCT. OVERALL, MANUFACTURING THRIVES THE COUNTRY ECONOMY. ON THE OTHER HAND, FOR GOOD CULTURE AND TO CREATE INTELLECTUAL PEOPLE EDUCATION IS VERY MUST FOR THE COUNTRY. EDUCATION GIVES THE KNOWLEDGE TO THE STUDENTS AND PEOPLE. MOREOVER, IT CREATES THE FUTURE GENERATION AND ADVANCE TECHNOLOGY. FOR EXAMPLE, IF ONE COUNTRY HAS GOOD EDUCATION SYSTEM, THAT COUNTRY IS VERY POPULAR IN INTELLECTUAL PROPERTY RIGHTS. BECAUSE OF THAT COUNTRY TECHNOLOGY WILL IMPROVE AND ALSO PEOPLE GET GOOD QUALITY LIFE. FURTHERMORE, IT MAKES PEOPLE TO THINK WISELY. THEREFORE, EDUCATION GIVES THE BREAD AND BUTTER FOR THE PEOPLE.
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OFTEN
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GOVERNMENTS
ARE ARGUING THAT THE ECONOMY IS MORE ADVANTAGEOUS AIM FOR THE
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COUNTRY
PROGRESS, WHEREAS
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FEW CITIZEN
EXPRESSING THEIR CONCERN TO OTHER STREAM
ALSO
SHOULD
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GIVE
EQUAL
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IMPORTANT
. IN THE BELOW ESSAY I AM GOING TO
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DESCRIBE
BOTH THE VIEWS.

FIRSTLY
, I BELIEVE THAT
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MANUFACTURING
IS
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VERY
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IMPORTANT
FOR THE COUNTRIES' GROWTH. WITH THE
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HELP
OF
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MANUFACTURING
, GROSS DOMESTIC
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PRODUCT
(GDP) AND PER CAPITA ARE CALCULATE. GDP
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SHOWS
THE
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PRODUCT
POTENTIAL AND FINANCIAL STATUS OF THE
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COUNTRY
.
FOR INSTANCE
, IF
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COUNTRY
PRODUCE A VARIOUS
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PRODUCTS
IT
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SHOWS
THE NATIONS'
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MANUFACTURING
ABILITY. DUE TO THAT LOTS OF MEMBERS ARE GETTING JOBS AND
ALSO
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PRODUCT
OF
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MANUFACTURING
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GIVES
COMFORT TO THE
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PEOPLE
.
MOREOVER
, IT
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USE
TO
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ROTATES
THE MONEY WITH BUYING AND SELLING OF PRODUCED
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PRODUCT
.
OVERALL
,
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MANUFACTURING
THRIVES THE
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COUNTRY
ECONOMY.

ON THE OTHER HAND
, FOR
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GOOD
CULTURE AND TO CREATE INTELLECTUAL
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PEOPLE
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EDUCATION
IS
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VERY
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MUST
FOR THE
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COUNTRY
.
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EDUCATION
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GIVES
THE KNOWLEDGE TO THE STUDENTS AND
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PEOPLE
.
MOREOVER
, IT CREATES THE FUTURE GENERATION AND ADVANCE TECHNOLOGY.
FOR EXAMPLE
, IF ONE
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COUNTRY
HAS
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GOOD
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EDUCATION
SYSTEM, THAT
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COUNTRY
IS
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VERY
POPULAR IN INTELLECTUAL PROPERTY RIGHTS.
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BECAUSE
OF THAT
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COUNTRY
TECHNOLOGY WILL
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IMPROVE
AND
ALSO
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PEOPLE
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GET
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GOOD
QUALITY LIFE.
FURTHERMORE
, IT
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MAKES
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PEOPLE
TO
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THINK
WISELY
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THEREFORE
,
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EDUCATION
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GIVES
THE BREAD AND BUTTER FOR THE
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PEOPLE
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IELTS essay Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.

Essay
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4 paragraphs
217 words
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