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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages? 3aAaJ
We cannot debate that food is one of the basic needs of humans. In fact, people can outsource food from different places and origins, and it's already normal that you can eat Japanese food even you are in Dubai. However, there some people argue that it is better for locals to patronage their own food because it believes to be more beneficial for the environment and economy. The question now is, how beneficial it is then? This essay will point out some cons and pros of this argument. First thing first let us discuss its advantages. When we purchase our own local food, we are not just helping our own people, such as farmers and other local suppliers but also the whole system of the food industry, and not only that it would be also beneficial for us consumer since we are taking food as fresh as possible. However the dilemma now is, can we sustain this? We know that if there will be demand and an increase of supplies are needed, hence we need more supplies to sustain the demand in the market. We are already in the modern world, wherein everything and anything we wanted is just a click of our hands, and whatever we buy from the USA will just be in our hand more or less than a week, that's how fast everything is and this kind of modern trading also helps our economy, not only our own local economy but also the global economy. Is it also great things that whatever other nations eat we are able to eat it? such as exotic food that we cannot find in our local market? Isn't amazing that we are able to eat an apple in the middle of the deserted country? I would like to end this essay by stating my stand. Personally, speaking, even though it's very patriotic of me to just patronize our own food I also wanted to experience what other people from another side of the world are eating and why they love it so much and practically speaking outsourcing food are not just beneficial to us but beneficial for global trading and economy.
We cannot debate that
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food
is one of the basic needs of humans. In fact,
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people
can outsource
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food
from
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different
places and origins, and it's already normal that you can
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eat
Japanese
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food
even you are in Dubai.
However
, there
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some
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people
argue that it is better for
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locals
to patronage their
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own
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food
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because
it believes to be more
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beneficial
for the environment and
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economy
. The question
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now
is, how
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it is then? This essay will point out
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cons and pros of this argument.

First
thing
first
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us discuss its advantages. When we
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purchase
our
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local
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, we are not
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helping our
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people
, such as farmers and other
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local
suppliers
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but
also
the whole system of the
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food
industry, and not
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only
that it would be
also
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beneficial
for us consumer since we are taking
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food
as fresh as possible.

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However
the dilemma
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now
is, can we sustain this? We know that if there will be demand and an increase of supplies
are needed
,
hence
we need more supplies to sustain the demand in the market.

We are already in the modern world, wherein everything and anything we wanted is
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just
a click of our hands, and whatever we
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buy
from the USA will
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just
be in our hand more or less than a week, that's how
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fast
everything is and this kind of modern trading
also
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helps
our
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economy
, not
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only
our
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own
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local
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economy
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also
the global
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. Is it
also
great things that whatever other nations
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eat
we are able to
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it?
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such
as exotic
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food
that we cannot find in our
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local
market? Isn't amazing that we are able to
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eat
an apple in the middle of the deserted country?

I would like to
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end
this essay by stating my stand.
Personally
, speaking,
even though
it's
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very
patriotic of me to
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just
patronize our
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own
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food
I
also
wanted to experience what other
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people
from another side of the world are eating and why they
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love
it
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so
much and
practically
speaking outsourcing
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are not
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beneficial
to us
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beneficial
for global trading and
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.
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IELTS essay Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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