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Libraries should focus on improving their technological resources rather than in building a large collection of paper books To what extend do you agree

Libraries are indispensable to most of the students and people who keen on reading. There has been considerable changes in the facilities inside the libraries over the recent years. Recently, the technological equipmenet are increasingly introduced in the libraries. However, people claim that libraries should emphasize on updating technological structure instead of increasing the books collection. I partially agree with that and I think paper books have its merits to human. It is irrefutable that establishing more technological resources is beneficial to every individual as the modern technology provide massive convenience for human beings. People could access to any information with more availability from the advances of computer. A compelling example of this can be seen in the internet─The internet encompasses a wide variety of information and academic articles in diverse aspect such as science, education, and environment. In this case, the internet is not only handy for people in search of the needed information, but also more available than paper books. However, paper books do have positive influence on the society and individual as well. On one hand, people could borrowed the textbooks and academic papers from the libraries. This provides more freedom and flexibility for the students and people who in need of the books. On the other hand, reading is a fundamental ability to every citizen in the community. Since the arrival of sophisticated and up-to-date technology, fewer people are willing to read the paper books. Therefore, there is a tremendous drop in people's literacy and reading comprehension. In this case, paper books should be remained in the libraries. By way of conclusion, I reiterate my opinion as argued above. Even though technological create more convenience and accessibility for people. Paper books, from my perspective, is vitally importance as well.
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people
who keen on reading. There has been considerable
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in the facilities inside the libraries over the recent years. Recently, the
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technological
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equipmenet
are
increasingly
introduced in the libraries.
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,
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people
claim that libraries should emphasize on updating
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technological
structure
instead
of increasing the
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collection. I
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paper
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books
have its merits to human.

It is irrefutable that establishing more
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technological
resources is beneficial to every individual as the modern technology provide massive convenience for human beings.
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People
could access to any information with more availability from the advances of computer. A compelling example of this can be
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seen
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internet encompasses a wide variety of information and academic articles in diverse aspect such as science, education, and environment.
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, the internet is not
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people
in search of the needed information,
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more available than paper books.

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, paper
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do have
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positive
influence on the society and individual
as well
. On one hand,
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borrowed
the textbooks and academic papers from the libraries. This provides more freedom and flexibility for the students and
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people
who in need of the
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books
.
On the other hand
, reading is a fundamental ability to every citizen in the community. Since the arrival of sophisticated and up-to-date technology, fewer
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people
are willing to read the paper
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books
.
Therefore
, there is a tremendous drop in
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people
's literacy and reading comprehension.
In this case
, paper
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books
should
be remained
in the libraries.

By way of conclusion, I reiterate my opinion as argued above.
Even though
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technological
create more convenience and accessibility for
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people
. Paper
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books
, from my perspective, is
vitally
importance
as well
.
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IELTS essay Libraries should focus on improving their technological resources rather than in building a large collection of paper books To what extend do you agree

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