Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.

Nowadays crime rate in young generation is escalating worldwide in most of the cities. This could be due to unemployment and parents’ negligence towards their children and this would be best solved by taking some efforts such as government should provide more employment opportunities for graduates and parents should spend more time with their children. The first primitive reason behind crime of adolescents is scarcity of jobs. Even though youngsters have degrees, certificates of universities but due to unavailability of jobs they did not get jobs which further forces them to choose wrong path. For example, if youth did not get job in their required field, they will try other ways to earn money like gambling, murders. Secondly, parents are busy in their hectic schedule that the do not have time to spend with their children. Children feel neglected due to the fact that they started doing things which are harmful for their future. However, without counselling and guidance they opt wrong path which would be devastated for their future. To combat the problem of crime, government have to take steps to eliminate the issue of unemployment. In other words, there should be some part time jobs available for youngsters so that their mind does not get distracted after completion of their studies. While parents or guardians of children should spend some time in a week so that children will not feel alone and share their feelings and concerns with them. Thus, it increases bonding between parents and children, and they will think twice before doing any harmful activity, To conclude, it is a joint effort of government and parents to make the next generation in good standing so that they will increase the economy of world instead of making it a strain on the world.
Nowadays crime rate in young generation is escalating worldwide in most of the cities. This could be due to unemployment and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents’
negligence towards their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
and this would be best solved by taking
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
efforts such as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should provide more employment opportunities for graduates and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
should spend more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
with their children.

The
first
primitive reason behind crime of adolescents is scarcity of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
.
Even though
youngsters have degrees, certificates of universities
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
due to unavailability of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
they did not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
which
further
forces them to choose
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
path.
For example
, if youth did not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
in their required field, they will try other ways to earn money like gambling, murders.
Secondly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
are busy in their hectic schedule that
After ‘the’, do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of ‘do’ is correct. If ‘do’ is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
the do
not have
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
to spend with their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Children
feel neglected due to the fact that they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
doing things which are harmful for their future.
However
, without counselling and guidance they opt
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
path which would
be devastated
for their future.

To combat the problem of crime,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
take steps to eliminate the issue of unemployment.
In other words
, there should be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
part
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
available for youngsters
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that their mind does not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
distracted after completion of their studies. While
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
or guardians of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
should spend
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
in a
Use a comma before ‘so’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
week
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
will not feel alone and share their feelings and concerns with them.
Thus
, it increases bonding between
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
, and they will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
twice
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
doing any harmful activity,

To conclude
, it is a joint effort of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the
next
generation in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
standing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they will increase the economy of world
instead
of making it a strain on the world.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts