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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.10

Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. v. 10
Many people in the present feel that learning about the history has no value for people in the present. It is widely disagree that modern people should understand how there become. This essay will discuss both sides of arguments and will support why people should know about the past. History is another important thing that people should know and leaned it. It can represent your nationality, home town or including your family, so it is truly important to understand. Especially in this day and age human have developed many technologies, including getting many research that people can easily find even though you does not want to visit the museum and walk around to get the information. The example I am a exchanged student in the state and my forest friend want to know about my country, however if I do not have any information to present my home country On the other hand, in the present human developed many technology and people did not get attention about history enough. People in this period of time do not have to understand about the history because we do not use those information in our daily life. The clearest example of the this is when you go for interview job in the company the interviewer will not ask about the history, however there will ask about the future how wold will develop. In conclusion, People are more interested in future more than the history. Moreover, it is better to understand the history not just focuss on the future,
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people
in the
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present
feel that learning about the
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history
has no value for
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people
in the
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present
. It is
widely
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disagree
that modern
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people
should
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understand
how there become. This essay will discuss both sides of arguments and will support why
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people
should know about the past.

History is another
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important
thing that
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people
should know and leaned it. It can represent your nationality, home town or including your family,
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so
it is
truly
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important
to
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understand
.
Especially
in this day and age human have developed
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many
technologies, including getting
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many research
that
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people
can
easily
find
even though
you
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does
not want to visit the museum and walk around to
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get
the information. The example I am
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a
exchanged student in the state and my forest friend want to know about my country,
however
if I do not have any information to
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present
my home
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country


On the other hand
, in the
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present
human developed
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many
technology and
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people
did not
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get
attention about
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history
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enough
.
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People
in this period of time do not
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have to
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understand
about the
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history
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because
we do not
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use
Did you mean "this information" or "those informations"?
those information
in our daily life. The clearest example of
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the this
is when you go for interview job in the
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company
the interviewer will not ask about the
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history
,
however
there will ask about the future how wold will develop.

In conclusion
,
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People
are more interested in future more than the
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history
.
Moreover
, it is better to
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understand
the
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history
not
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just
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focuss on
the future,
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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