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It’s a known fact that human populations are growing rapidly, according to the text, this will affect the birds’ habitats in the United States and will result that number of birds will decline.

It’s a known fact that human populations are growing rapidly, according to the text, this will affect the birds’ habitats in the United States and will result that number of birds will decline. 2bPQx
It’s a known fact that human populations are growing rapidly, according to the text, this will affect the birds’ habitats in the United States and will result that number of birds will decline. On the other hand, the professor finds that the argument presented by the text to support its claim is not accurate and contain misleading facts. First, the professor partially agree that as human settlements expands it will destroy more bird's natural habitats, but she added that the settlements itself provides better and large habitats for the birds. She gave an example of pigeon being around the urban city and the Hulk, foker two kinds of birds that prey on pigeon, also used the new habitats. The professor concludes that some bird’s species will shrink while other will continue to thrive. However, the text only highlights the dark side of the vanishing habitat. Second, the professor agrees that because human populations are growing too fast agricultural activities must meet the needs, but at the same time she stated that in the United States less and less lands are used for agriculture purpose because of advanced technology used to produce variety of food, and more food per unite of lands. However, the text states that as more food are required more wildness area will disappear. Finally, the professor also agrees that as the need to pesticides are increasing they will cause more harm to the wild life. But she added that people are becoming more and more aware of the negative effects of pesticide and based on that two major changes are happening; first new, improved less toxic pesticide are produced. Second, genetic modification to plant to repel pest, don’t need to be treated with pesticide and more importantly do not harm the birds are being produce. On the other hand, the text asserts that pesticide are poisons harming the birds in so many ways starting with interfering with their food chain and ending by preventing the birds from reproducing.
It’s a known fact that human populations are growing
rapidly
, according to the
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text
, this will affect the
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birds’
habitats in the United States and will result that number of
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birds
will decline.
On the other hand
, the
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professor
finds that the argument presented by the
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text
to support its claim is not accurate and contain misleading facts.

First
, the
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professor
partially
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agree
that as human settlements expands it will
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destroy
more
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bird's
natural habitats,
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but
she
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added
that the settlements itself provides better and large habitats for the
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birds
. She gave an example of pigeon being around the urban city and the Hulk,
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foker
two kinds of
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birds
that prey on pigeon,
also
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used
the new habitats. The
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professor
concludes that
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some
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bird’s
species will shrink while other will continue to thrive.
However
, the
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text
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only
highlights the dark side of the vanishing habitat.

Second, the
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professor
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agrees
that
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because
human populations are growing too
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fast
agricultural activities
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must
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meet
the needs,
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but
at the same time she stated that in the United States less and
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less
lands are
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used
for agriculture purpose
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because
of advanced technology
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used
to produce variety of
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food
, and more
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food
per unite of lands.
However
, the
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text
states that as more
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food
are required
more wildness area will disappear.

Finally
, the
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professor
also
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agrees
that as the need to
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pesticides
are increasing they will cause more harm to the wild life.
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But
she
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added
that
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people
are becoming more and more aware of the
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negative
effects of
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pesticide
and based on that two major
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changes
are happening;
first
new,
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improved
less toxic
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pesticide
are produced
. Second, genetic modification to plant to repel pest, don’t need to
be treated
with
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pesticide
and more
importantly
do not harm the
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birds
are being produce.
On the other hand
, the
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text
asserts that
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pesticide
are poisons harming the
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birds
in
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so
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many
ways starting with interfering with their
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food
chain and ending by preventing the
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birds
from reproducing.
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IELTS essay It’s a known fact that human populations are growing rapidly, according to the text, this will affect the birds’ habitats in the United States and will result that number of birds will decline.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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