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It is sometimes said that governments should dedicate a fixed proportion of their country’s income to foreign aid each year, and this fixed proportion should always be donated to other countries. Opponents of this idea, however, say that aid should have no fixed proportion, and help should only be sent to other countries at times when it is really needed. What are the arguments on both sides of this debate? What is your own view on the matter?

It is sometimes said that governments should dedicate a fixed proportion of their country’s income to foreign aid each year, and this fixed proportion should always be donated to other countries. Opponents of this idea, however, say that aid should have no fixed proportion, and help should only be sent to other countries at times when it is really needed. What are the arguments on both sides of this debate? What is your own view on the matter? 7aAJb
The issue of foreign aid goes to the heart of how nations should cooperate together, and whether this should be on a ‘quota’ system or more ‘as needed. ’ In this often heated debate, the opposing arguments can perhaps be summarised as follows. Proponents of the quota system claim that wealthier nations have a moral duty to sacrifice some of their income to help poorer countries, and that this duty does not rise or fall depending on circumstances. This argument is often used to justify the quota arrangement for former imperial states such as Holland, France or Britain. Moreover, the arguments goes, the fixed proportion system allows the receiving countries to plan and budget reliably, building the foreign aid into their economic calculations. However, opponents of the fixed donation system respond that this budgetary aspect is in fact the most damaging aspect of the idea. They point out that, if aid money is provided regardless of whether it is actually needed, the funds become part of the recipient country’s administrative system, with all the dangers of inefficiency and corruption that this involves. It must be said that fixed aid to some developing countries falls into this trap, as even the local charities themselves will agree. What is more, if aid funds could be held back until times of emergency, such as floods, famine or civil war, the money available would then be far higher and thus would help more people in distress. To conclude, it appears to me that opponents of the quota system have the more robust argument, with their concerns over unnecessary donations which reduce emergency funding in future. We all recognise a moral duty to help those in need, but surely these resources should be targeted more strictly towards sufferers, rather than sent permanently to government departments to become part of the local economy.
The issue of foreign
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aid
goes to the heart of how nations should cooperate together, and whether this

should be on a
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‘quota’
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system
or more ‘as needed. ’ In this
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heated debate, the opposing arguments can

perhaps be
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as follows.

Proponents of the
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quota
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system
claim that wealthier nations have a moral duty to sacrifice
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some
of

their income to
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help
poorer
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countries
, and that this duty does not rise or fall depending on circumstances. This

argument is
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often
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used
to justify the
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quota
arrangement for former imperial states such as Holland, France or

Britain.
Moreover
, the arguments goes, the
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fixed
proportion
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system
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allows
the receiving
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countries
to plan and

budget
reliably
, building the foreign
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aid
into their economic calculations.
However
, opponents of the
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fixed
donation
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respond that this budgetary aspect is in fact the

most damaging aspect of the
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idea
. They point out that, if
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aid
money
is provided
regardless of whether it is

actually needed, the funds become part of the recipient
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country’s
administrative
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system
, with all the
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dangers
of

inefficiency and corruption that this involves. It
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be said
that
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fixed
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aid
to
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developing
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countries
falls

into this trap, as even the local charities themselves will
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agree
.
What is more
, if
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aid
funds could
be held
back

until times of emergency, such as floods, famine or civil war, the money available would then be far higher and

thus
would
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help
more
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people
in distress.

To conclude
, it appears to me that opponents of the
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quota
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system
have the more robust argument,

with their concerns over unnecessary donations which
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reduce
emergency funding
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in future
. We all
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recognise
a

moral duty to
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help
those in need,
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surely
these resources should
be targeted
more
strictly
towards sufferers,

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sent
permanently
to
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government
departments to become part of the local economy.
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IELTS essay It is sometimes said that governments should dedicate a fixed proportion of their country’s income to foreign aid each year, and this fixed proportion should always be donated to other countries. Opponents of this idea, however, say that aid should have no fixed proportion, and help should only be sent to other countries at times when it is really needed. What are the arguments on both sides of this debate? What is your own view on the matter?

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