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It is often argued that social networking sites especially Facebook are influencing people as well as societies in a negative way.

It is often argued that social networking sites especially Facebook are influencing people as well as societies in a negative way. I completely disagree with this statement because it social networks help people to solve many socio-economical problems. There are many reasons I believe that social media plays an important role in an individuals’ life. Firstly, it makes human relationships stronger. To be clear, social networking sites bring people from different parts of the world together. These sites have even helped many people to find their lost families. In addition, social networking sites allow people who have common interests to form groups. For example, Facebook has several community groups created by people with extra ordinary skills in art, music, dance or cookery. Those who are interested in these activities can join these groups and learn new skills. Moreover, it gives relaxation to those who do not have time to meet or communicate with anyone outside. Another important advantage of social networking sites is they help people to act against social issues. To explain it further, users often upload photos of missing persons and other social problems. For instance, recently, photos of missing kids were posted on the Facebook by their family member. Due to the large influx of likes and shares, the picture became quite famous and authorities had to take quick measures to resolve the case. As a result the culprit was captured and penalised under law. In conclusion, social networking sites have some drawbacks but if they are used properly they have more merits than demerits.
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IELTS essay It is often argued that social networking sites especially Facebook are influencing people as well as societies in a negative way.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
258 words
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