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It is inevitable that as technology develops so traditional cultures must be lost. Technology and tradition are incompatible - you cannot have both together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons and include and relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is inevitable that as technology develops so traditional cultures must be lost. Technology and tradition are incompatible - you cannot have both together. with this statement? Give reasons and include and relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. VMKD
There is no doubt that these days the technology progression has a great impact on our life and culture across different generations. Some people claim that there is an inverse relationship between development of technology and traditional cultures. Moreover, they believe that a person is unable to maintain both of them simultaneously. This essay will argue why technology and traditional cultures are moderately opposite to each other. Our ancestors followed the traditional cultures blindly, and that is because they were surrounded by their cultures away from technology and other people around the world. To illustrate, at the time that they had televisions and the internet in their homes they noticed others cultures and reevaluated their own. For example Saudi culture such as female education has been affected by scholarship programs which expose students to a vastly different environment from home country, they came back with new ideas as a part of their personality and that lead to cultural changes in Saudi’s families and workplaces. In other words, the varieties of technology in people’s life are assisting them to explore and exchange cultures easily which reflects on their behavior and lifestyles. Despite the widespread of social media applications, people keep some cultures immutable. This is because the cultural differences are the key to determine the identity of each nation. For instance, Muslims have shared their traditional food and specific decoration of Ramadan on FaceBook for ages as part of their cultural identity. This mean as technology develops, some traditional cultures might remain fixed due to peoples chosen to preserve it. In conclusion, although the technology facilitates our lives, we cannot deny that the traditional cultures make us feel different from each other. Therefore, I partially agree that technology and traditional culture are opposite to each other. However, technology is a double-edged sword, we must not resist it and at the same time we have prevented it from destroying our cultures.
There is no doubt that these days the
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progression has a great impact on our life and
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culture
across
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different
generations.
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people
claim that there is an inverse relationship between development of
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and
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traditional
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cultures
.
Moreover
, they believe that a person is unable to maintain both of them
simultaneously
. This essay will argue why
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technology
and
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traditional
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cultures
are
moderately
opposite to each other.

Our ancestors followed the
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traditional
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cultures
blindly
, and
that is
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because
they
were surrounded
by their
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cultures
away from
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technology
and
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other
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people
around the world. To illustrate, at the time that they had televisions and the internet in their homes they noticed others
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cultures
and reevaluated their
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own
.
For example
Saudi
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culture
such as female education has been
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affected
by scholarship programs which expose students to a
vastly
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different
environment from home country, they came back with new
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ideas
as a part of their personality and that lead to cultural
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changes
in Saudi’s families and workplaces. In
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other
words, the varieties of
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technology
in
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people’s
life are assisting them to explore and exchange
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cultures
easily
which reflects on their behavior and lifestyles.

Despite
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the widespread of
social media applications,
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keep
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some
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immutable. This is
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the cultural differences are the key to determine the identity of each nation.
For instance
, Muslims have shared their
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traditional
food and specific decoration of Ramadan on
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FaceBook
for ages as part of their cultural identity. This mean as
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technology
develops,
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some
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traditional
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cultures
might remain
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fixed
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peoples
chosen to preserve it.

In conclusion
, although the
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technology
facilitates our
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lives
, we cannot deny that the
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traditional
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cultures
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make
us feel
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different
from each
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other
.
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, I
partially
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agree
that
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and
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traditional
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culture
are opposite to each
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other
.
However
,
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technology
is a double-edged sword, we
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must
not resist it and at the same time we have
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prevented
it from destroying our
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cultures
.
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IELTS essay It is inevitable that as technology develops so traditional cultures must be lost. Technology and tradition are incompatible - you cannot have both together. with this statement? Give reasons and include and relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Essay
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4 paragraphs
319 words
6.0
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