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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age.punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. to what extent do you agree or disagree with thia opinion? What sorts od punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with thia opinion? What sorts od punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? YnQB
It is a debatable that children should learn good virtue at the childhood by punishing them. However, some society inhabitants argue that it is essential for children to learn moral values from an early childhood and punishment is the best way to teach this. I completely agree with this statement because teachers and parents roles are to guid children to the right pathway. This essay will analyse why the punishment is necessary anr which punishment to be allowed to teacher's and patent's for shape children's bright career. On the one hand, for the betterment of child future, it is essential to punish them. To support my argument there are numerous reason will be discussed. Firstly, youngsters will become spoilt and they can do whatever they want. If punishment will not give to them, they can do more mistakes in future. To examplify this, recent research by Oxford University revealed that children received punishment while making mistakes have excellent vartues compared to their peers. Secondly, children will concentrate more in study because they knows that if they are going to make mistakes then they will have to paid extra work. As result childre become more brilliant and results can be unbelievable. Thirdly, due to punishment children learn, how to respects people, elders. teachers and loved ones. This positive behavior will give a respectable person to the society. On the other hand, parent's and teacher's should punish to children but not physically but another various ways such as providing them activities like if they make mistakes give them task liek planting a tree and cleaning the environment, such way they also learn the value of environment. Another way is keep them away from things like Toys, Mobile Phones, Television so that they thing twise before making any mistakes. In conclusion, after antrospecting both the arguments, I pen down to saying that, teaching moral values to the children is the fruitful if the intention of punishment is to teach them, But not by phisical punishment
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virtue at the childhood by punishing them.
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,
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some
society inhabitants argue that it is essential for
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children
to
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learn
moral values from an early childhood and
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punishment
is the best way to teach this. I completely
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agree
with this statement
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because
teachers and parents roles are to
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guid
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children
to the right pathway. This essay will
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analyse
why the
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punishment
is necessary
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anr
which
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punishment
to be
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allowed
to teacher's and patent's for shape children's bright career.

On the one hand, for the betterment of child future, it is essential to punish them. To support my argument there are numerous reason will
be discussed
.
Firstly
, youngsters will become
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spoilt and
they can do whatever they want. If
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punishment
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will not give
to them, they can do more
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mistakes
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. To
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examplify
this, recent research by Oxford University revealed that
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children
received
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punishment
while making
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mistakes
have excellent
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vartues
compared to their peers.
Secondly
,
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children
will concentrate more in study
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because
they
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knows
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make
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mistakes
then they will
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have to
paid extra work. As result
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childre
become more brilliant and results can be unbelievable.
Thirdly
, due to
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punishment
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children
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learn
, how to respects
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people
, elders.
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teachers
and
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loved
ones. This
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positive
behavior will give a respectable person to the society.

On the other hand
, parent's and teacher's should punish to
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children
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but
not
physically
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but
another various ways such as providing them activities like if they
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make
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mistakes
give them task
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planting a tree and cleaning the environment, such way they
also
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learn
the value of environment. Another way is
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keep
them away from things like Toys, Mobile Phones, Television
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so
that they
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twise
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before
making any mistakes.

In conclusion
, after
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antrospecting
both the arguments, I pen down to saying that, teaching moral values to the
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children
is the fruitful if the intention of
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punishment
is to teach them,
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But
not by
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phisical
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punishment
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IELTS essay It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with thia opinion? What sorts od punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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4 paragraphs
331 words
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