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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them, learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them, learn this distinction. with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children? DGdE
During childhood, it is better to understand the difference between right and wrong. The punishment could make children aware of doing something wrong or right. In my opinion, I agree that firstly, the kids must be taught with love and care, and if they do not understand then only punishment should be given to them to shape their future and keep them in the right direction of life. First of all, nowadays, mostly parents are busy with their hectic working schedules and they might not have enough time to focus on their kids. Consequently, there is a chance for the children to become annoyed and further they may engage themselves in wrongdoing. Therefore, parents should give their quality time to kids at home and teach them about the difference between wrong and right by detailed discussions, so that the juveniles must be understood where they might be wrong. The provision of punishment should be in the case of disobedience by the kids if they might not follow the instructions. In such situations parents must punish their children by restricting their freedom to play outside or meeting with their friends or even they should not be allowed to use their gadgets until they are not realizing their mistakes and feel sorry for the same. Secondly, in the schools, most students may not be serious about their studies and are always trying to make fun in the classroom. Hence, teachers must train their students about how to behave in the classroom and support them to change their behavior. The teacher must be taken care of the students, as they might not be hurt due to strong punishments that could have a negative impact on the kids. The provision of punishment must be used if the students do not cooperate to improve themselves. Most of the time it is observed that after getting hurtful punishments children start to avoid going to schools. Hence, teachers should adopt different types of punishing skills to maintain the healthy relationship with their students. For instance, our class teachers gave us a lot of homework in the form of punishment rather than hurting us, which helped a lot to build a good relationship between student and teacher. In conclusion, students must be taught with love and affection rather than giving them harsh punishments. The brutal punishments may lead to the destructive development in the brain of children which may lead to negative impact on their personal developments.
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children
aware of doing something
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my opinion, I
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that
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kids
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with
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love
and care, and if

they do not understand then
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only
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punishment
should be
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given
to them to shape

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their
future and
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keep
them in the
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right
direction of life.
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First of all
, nowadays,
mostly
parents are busy with their hectic
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working


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schedules
and they might not have
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enough
time to focus on their kids.

Consequently
, there is a chance for the
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children
to become annoyed and

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further
they may engage themselves in wrongdoing.
Therefore
, parents

should give their quality time to
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kids
at home and teach them about the

difference between
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wrong
and
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right
by detailed discussions,
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so
that the

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juveniles
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must
be understood
where they might be
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wrong
. The provision
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of


punishment should be in the case of disobedience by the
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kids
if they might

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not
follow the instructions. In such situations parents
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must
punish
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their


children by restricting their freedom to play outside or meeting with their

friends or even they should not be
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allowed
to
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use
their gadgets until they

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are not realizing
their mistakes and feel sorry for the same.

Secondly
, in the schools, most
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students
may not be serious about their

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studies
and are always trying to
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make
fun in the classroom.
Hence
, teachers

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must
train their
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students
about how to behave in the classroom and support

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them
to
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change
their behavior. The teacher
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must
be taken
care of
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the


students, as they might not
be hurt
due to strong
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punishments
that could

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have
a
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negative
impact on the
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kids
. The provision of
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punishment
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must
be
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used
if the
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students
do not cooperate to
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improve
themselves. Most of
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the


time it
is observed
that after getting hurtful
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punishments
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children
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start
to

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avoid
going to schools.
Hence
, teachers should adopt
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different
types of

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punishing
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skills
to maintain the healthy relationship with their
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students
. For

instance, our
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class
teachers gave us
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a lot of
homework in the form of

punishment
rather
than hurting us, which
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helped
a lot to build a
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good


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relationship
between
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student
and teacher.

In conclusion
,
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students
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must
be taught
with
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love
and affection
rather
than

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giving
them harsh
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punishments
. The brutal
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punishments
may lead to
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the


destructive development in the brain of
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children
which may lead to
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negative


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impact
on their personal developments.
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IELTS essay It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them, learn this distinction. with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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