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Intro: One of the controversial topics is about to being a parent which demonstrates not enough support to their performance at school while others put under too much pressure by showing over willingness toward their children. Both of these situations may affect on a child detrimentally. In my assumptions, it is extremely vital to keep a balance out parental guidance and supervision. Body1: First of all, parents of children who receive too much pressure, guess by achieving high grades at school, their children will have higher chance to attain success. Most of the parents want to see their children with successful life, conversely, they forget success is not only about educational background, but also personal development. Each child is born with a special talent which has to have been found out and is led to improve in early years. Solely, the right supervision of parents is able to come up whether their children are happy as owning brilliant achievements. Children are not the pro

Intro: One of the controversial topics is about to being a parent which demonstrates not enough support to their performance at school while others put under too much pressure by showing over willingness toward their children. Both of these situations may affect on a child detrimentally. In my assumptions, it is extremely vital to keep a balance out parental guidance and supervision. Body1: First of all, parents of children who receive too much pressure, guess by achieving high grades at school, their children will have higher chance to attain success. Most of the parents want to see their children with successful life, conversely, they forget success is not only about educational background, but also personal development. Each child is born with a special talent which has to have been found out and is led to improve in early years. Solely, the right supervision of parents is able to come up whether their children are happy as owning brilliant achievements. Children are not the pro RNVDY
One of the controversial topics is about being a parent which demonstrates not enough support to their performance at school while others put under too much pressure by showing over willingness toward their children. Both of these situations may affect a child detrimentally. In my assumptions, it is extremely vital to keep a balance out parental guidance and supervision. First of all, parents of children who receive too much pressure, guess by achieving high grades at school, their children will have higher chance to attain success. Most of the parents want to see their children with successful life, conversely, they forget success is not only about educational background, but also personal development. Each child is born with a special talent which has to have been found out and is led to improve in early years. Solely, the right supervision of parents is able to come up whether their children are happy as owning brilliant achievements. Children are not the property of parents who bragging about or showing off by comparing the achievements of their children to others. On the contrary, it is critical to encourage children to perform well at school. Parents are the first teachers of their children, being an example of humanity, discipline, justice and so on. Attitude of parents impacts directly on children’s education system, mental health, personal development and finding their own way of life. Consequently, it can bring about to lose opportunity of life a complete life. Parent’s neglection is absolutely unacceptable, while damaging someone’s life. To sum up, both the children who are under pressure of achieving parent’s goals and suffering social burdens, and receiving not enough encouragement by parents will come to face to face personality, and mental health problems. I would like to see mature and well-determined young generation for all nations, as they are the future of the world.
One of the controversial topics is about being a
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parent
which demonstrates not
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enough
support to their performance at school while others put under too much pressure by showing over willingness toward their
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children
. Both of these situations may affect a child
detrimentally
. In my assumptions, it is
extremely
vital to
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keep
a balance out parental guidance and supervision.

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First of all
,
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parents
of
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children
who receive too much pressure, guess by achieving high grades at school, their
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children
will have higher chance to attain success. Most of the
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parents
want to
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see
their
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children
with successful
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life
,
conversely
, they forget success is not
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only
about educational background,
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but
also
personal development. Each child
is born
with a special talent which
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has to
have
been found
out and
is led
to
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improve
in early years.
Solely
, the right supervision of
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parents
is able to
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come
up whether their
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children
are happy as owning brilliant achievements.
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Children
are not the property of
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parents
who bragging about or showing off by comparing the achievements of their
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children
to others.

On the contrary
, it is critical to encourage
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
to perform well at school.
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Parents
are the
first
teachers of their
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children
, being an example of humanity, discipline, justice and
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so
on. Attitude of
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parents
impacts
directly
on
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children’s
education system, mental health, personal development and finding their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
way of
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life
.
Consequently
, it can bring about to lose opportunity of
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life
a complete
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life
.
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Parent’s
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neglection
is
absolutely
unacceptable, while damaging someone’s life.

To sum up, both the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
who are under pressure of achieving
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parent’s
goals and suffering social burdens, and receiving not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
encouragement by
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parents
will
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come
This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only "to face".
to face to face
personality, and mental health problems. I would like to
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see
mature and well-determined young generation for all nations, as they are the future of the world.
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IELTS essay Intro: One of the controversial topics is about to being a parent which demonstrates not enough support to their performance at school while others put under too much pressure by showing over willingness toward their children. Both of these situations may affect on a child detrimentally. In my assumptions, it is extremely vital to keep a balance out parental guidance and supervision. Body1: First of all, parents of children who receive too much pressure, guess by achieving high grades at school, their children will have higher chance to attain success. Most of the parents want to see their children with successful life, conversely, they forget success is not only about educational background, but also personal development. Each child is born with a special talent which has to have been found out and is led to improve in early years. Solely, the right supervision of parents is able to come up whether their children are happy as owning brilliant achievements. Children are not the pro

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4 paragraphs
308 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
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  • Intro: One of the controversial topics is about to being a parent which demonstrates not enough support to their performance at school while others put under too much pressure by showing over willingness toward their children. Both of these situations may affect on a child detrimentally. In my assumptions, it is extremely vital to keep a balance out parental guidance and supervision. Body1: First of all, parents of children who receive too much pressure, guess by achieving high grades at school, their children will have higher chance to attain success. Most of the parents want to see their children with successful life, conversely, they forget success is not only about educational background, but also personal development. Each child is born with a special talent which has to have been found out and is led to improve in early years. Solely, the right supervision of parents is able to come up whether their children are happy as owning brilliant achievements. Children are not the pro