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Integrated writing from delta key practice test 1

Integrated writing from delta key practice test 1 AjaLx
The reading states that some foods like blue berries, tomatoes, broccoli, and garlic have super powers and prevents the disease s like Alzheimer's, cancer, high cholesterol, obesity and diabetes. However, the professor explains that the foods do not have super power and its simply exaggeration and thus refutes each of the author's opinion. First, the reading claims that blue berries have positive effect on brain function and motor movement in aging rats and thus prevents mental decline in mice and stops Alzheimer's disease. In addition to this it states that eating one cup of blue berries everyday will reduce aging related damage in human beings. The professor refutes the point by saying that there may be mental decline in rats or mice as there is evidence, but the same thing is not possible in humans because there is no sufficient evidence to prove that. Second, the reading posits that tomatoes reduces cholesterol and reduce the risk of prostate cancer due to the presence of red pigment lycopene. However, the professor says that tomato may be good for health because it has nutrients and one cannot consider that if we eat tomato we will not get cancer its completely false. Third, the reading says that broccoli and other foods of cabbage family have antioxidants and help to prevent colon cancer. However, the professor says that the broccoli and other foods of cabbage family may prevent colon cancer but there is no direct proof of it. In addition the reading states that garlic reduces high cholesterol and common cold. However, the professor oppose s the point by explaining that garlic is not having power to reduce cholesterol and the recent evidence on garlic reducing cholesterol is unclear.
The
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reading
states that
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some
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foods
like blue berries, tomatoes, broccoli, and garlic have super powers and
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prevents
the disease s like Alzheimer's,
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cancer
, high cholesterol, obesity and diabetes.
However
, the
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professor
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explains
that the
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foods
do not have super power and its
simply
exaggeration and
thus
refutes each of the author's opinion.

First
, the
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reading
claims that blue berries have
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positive
effect on brain function and motor movement in aging rats and
thus
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prevents
mental decline in mice and
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stops
Alzheimer's disease.
In addition
to this it states that eating one cup of blue berries
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everyday
will
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reduce
aging related damage in human beings. The
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professor
refutes the point by saying that there may be mental decline in rats or mice as there is evidence,
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but
the same thing is not possible in humans
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because
there is no sufficient evidence to prove that.

Second, the
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reading
posits that tomatoes
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reduces
cholesterol and
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reduce
the
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risk
of prostate
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cancer
due to the presence of red pigment
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lycopene
.
However
, the
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professor
says that tomato may be
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good
for health
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because
it has nutrients and one cannot consider that if we eat tomato we will not
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get
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cancer
its completely false.

Third, the
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reading
says that broccoli and other
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foods
of cabbage family have antioxidants and
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help
to
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prevent
colon
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cancer
.
However
, the
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professor
says that the broccoli and other
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foods
of cabbage family may
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prevent
colon
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cancer
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but
there is no direct proof of it. In
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addition
the
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reading
states that garlic
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reduces
high cholesterol and common
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cold
.
However
, the
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professor
oppose s the point by explaining that garlic is not having power to
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reduce
cholesterol and the recent evidence on garlic reducing cholesterol is unclear.
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IELTS essay Integrated writing from delta key practice test 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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