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Integrated- group work

Integrated- group work E363q
The passage explains how group work can promote the decision making process. However, the lecturer mentions some disadvantages of such practice which cast doubt on the claims of the reading. Firstly, the professor argues that people tend to conform to the ideas of the majority in a group. Thus, groups usually ignore any contradicting view. This is against the passage claim that working together in accomplishing a task leads to the pooling of intellectual resources and a more varied and deeper view toward a problem. Secondly, the lecturer highlights the false believe of being immune from making mistakes among groups. He illustrates his point by a case of prison break due to the fact that none of the responsible agents could believe that a single prisoner would deceive them. This is in contrast to the passage that says sharing the responsibility of making decision, to reduce the risk of making wrong decision, is a benefit of group work. Finally, he asserts that group members usually reassure each other about their decisions so that they may stick to a wrong idea. The Ford company failure in making a best seller product is an example of this type of mall-efficiency. This undermines the reading that says a benefit of group work is brainstorming, which results in achieving worthwhile goals.
The passage
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explains
how
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group
work can promote the
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decision making
process.
However
, the lecturer mentions
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some
disadvantages of such practice which cast doubt on the claims of the reading.

Firstly
, the professor argues that
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people
tend to conform to the
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ideas
of the majority in a
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group
.
Thus
,
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groups
usually
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ignore
any contradicting view. This is against the passage claim that working together in accomplishing a task leads to the pooling of intellectual resources and a more varied and deeper view toward a problem.

Secondly
, the lecturer highlights the false
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believe
of being immune from making mistakes among
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groups
. He illustrates his point by a case of prison break due to the fact that none of the responsible agents could believe that a single prisoner would deceive them. This is
in contrast
to the passage that says sharing the responsibility of making
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decision
, to
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reduce
the
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risk
of making
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wrong
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decision
, is a benefit of
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group
work.

Finally
, he asserts that
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group
members
usually
reassure each other about their
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decisions
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so
that they may stick to a
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wrong
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idea
. The Ford
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company
failure in making
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a
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best seller
product is an example of this type of mall-efficiency. This undermines the reading that says a benefit of
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group
work is brainstorming, which results in achieving worthwhile goals.
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IELTS essay Integrated- group work

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
217 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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