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Integrated essay: AIDS medicationAIDS is a disease that has killed millions of people all over the world. Most of the cases of AIDS in the world are in poorer countries where the people can’t afford to buy the drugs that would help keep them alive and hea

Integrated essay: AIDS medicationAIDS is a disease that has killed millions of people all over the world. Most of the cases of AIDS in the world are in poorer countries where the people can’t afford to buy the drugs that would help keep them alive and hea Dl367

The reading passage talks about few solution that should be adopted by the poor country in order to help their population to buy necessary medication to treat AIDS. However, the professor explain that those solutions are not feasible and refutes each of the author's reason. First, the article states that the profit of the pharmaceutical companies which sell the Aids drug are too high and they cannot be afforded by the patients. The professor refutes this reason by stating that the pharmaceutical companies function as any other business, . If they wouldn't make a profit, there will not be investitors, money and hence no new drugs can be developed. Second, the article claims that governments should buy the drags because they will get a lower price by purchasing large quantities. However, the professor argue this point by saying that the governments in poor countries are poor too. They will not have money to spent on the huge amounts of AIDS drugs. Third, the reading passage avers that the poor countries should be encouraged to make their own cheap version of the drug even though this is a felony. The lecturer opposes this argument saying that this is considered a stilling. Moreover, the manufacturers in poor countries will not have money to produce their drugs in a proper way. They might use tainted chemicals and do not perform the quality control tests on the drugs in order to produce the cheap version of the medication. These, instead of helping people might kill them.

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few solution
 that should be adopted
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poor
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country
 in order to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 their population to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchase
buy
 necessary medication to treat AIDS. However
, the professor This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :interpret
explain
 that those solutions are not feasible and refutes each of the author's reason.

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, the article states that the profit of the pharmaceutical This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisescorporations
companies
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drug
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high and
 they cannot be afforded
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, .
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make
 a profit, there will not be Possible spelling mistake found.investorsinvestigatorsinvestitureinvestitures
investitors
, money and hence
 no new You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpharmaceuticalprescriptionpoisonnarcoticremedycure
drugs
 can be developed
.

Second, the article claims that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritiespublic authorities
governments
 should This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchase
buy
 the drags This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 they will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 a lower price by purchasing large quantities. However
, the professor argue this point by saying that the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritiespublic authorities
governments
 in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withunderprivilegedpoverty-strickenneedymeagerpennilesslow
poor
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countries
 are You use this word too often, consider replacing it withunderprivilegedpoverty-strickenneedymeagerpennilesslow
poor
 too. They will not have money to spent on the huge amounts of AIDS drugs.

Third, the reading passage avers that the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withunderprivilegedpoverty-strickenneedymeagerpennilesslow
poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 should be encouraged
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :economical
cheap
 version of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpharmaceuticalprescriptionpoisonnarcoticremedycure
drug
even though
 this is a felony. The lecturer opposes this argument saying that this is considered
 a stilling. Moreover
, the manufacturers in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withunderprivilegedpoverty-strickenneedymeagerpennilesslow
poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 will not have money to produce their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpharmaceuticalprescriptionpoisonnarcoticremedycure
drugs
Consider replacing "in a proper way" with the adverb for "proper"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a proper way
. They might This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 tainted chemicals and do not perform the quality control This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :evaluates
tests
 on the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpharmaceuticalprescriptionpoisonnarcoticremedycure
drugs
 in order to produce the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :economical
cheap
 version of the medication. These, instead
 of helping This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 might kill them. 