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In todays world many families find it necessary for both parents to go outside home for work to earn money. But children feel lack of support in the absence of parents. Discuss and give your opinion.

In todays world many families find it necessary for both parents to go outside home for work to earn money. But children feel lack of support in the absence of parents. Discuss and give your opinion. GM3Vx
In this materialistic world, people are running in the rat race to accomplish more and more in education, business, employment and so on. Presently, earning money is supposed to be a dire need to survive happily for both parents. By contrast, absence of parents is becoming perilous for future of their children. Here, this essay will account for both sides with my own perception. There are multifarious points to support former view. First and foremost, earning by both parents allows to offer aristocratic lifestyle to their juveniles. For example, parents can afford expensive but luxurious el. . .
In this materialistic world,
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are running in the rat race to accomplish more and more in education, business, employment and
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on.
Presently
, earning money
is supposed
to be a dire need to survive
happily
for both
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parents
. By contrast, absence of
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parents
is becoming perilous for future of their children. Here, this essay will account for both sides with my
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own
perception.

There are multifarious points to support former view.
First
and foremost, earning by both
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parents
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allows
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to offer
aristocratic lifestyle to their juveniles.
For example
,
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parents
can afford expensive
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but
luxurious
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IELTS essay In todays world many families find it necessary for both parents to go outside home for work to earn money. But children feel lack of support in the absence of parents. Discuss and give your opinion.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
98 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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