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In the reading passage, it is indicated that the commercialization of fossil discoveries and collections could be harmful for both the investigation of fossils and the development of science.

In the reading passage, it is indicated that the commercialization of fossil discoveries and collections could be harmful for both the investigation of fossils and the development of science. wBmkN
In the reading passage, it is indicated that the commercialization of fossil discoveries and collections could be harmful for both the investigation of fossils and the development of science. Which the professor talks about the same topic, they hold different positions, and the professor explains her opinions specifically. Firstly, as suggested in the reading article, private collections could forbid the public to see the fossils and let them finally lose their curiosity of ancient fossils. However, the presenter argues that it is the private collectors who has been increasing the exposure of fossils to people, while the collections belongs to schools and public institutions do not allowed to be exhibited in front of the public. Moreover, the reading states the concern of private commercial collectors with limited knowledge about fossil could waste the scientific source and leave some important discoveries unachievable. In fact, the lecture introduces in details that a basic procedure before fossils becoming valuable is letting scientific experts examine them and dig the whole information of them first. Hence, the worry in the reading passage is unreasonable and unnecessary at all. Finally, in the reading, it worries about some information might be missing forever since private collectors often damage the position messages from fossils when they were laying underground. But the professor believes that we have gained more in commercial diggings than loss, because most of the fossils was exposed to the surface by private sectors. Universities and scientific institutions have little power in finding fossils, more evidence would be completely undiscovered if the private collection was forbidden.
In the
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passage, it
is indicated
that the commercialization of
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fossil
discoveries and
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collections
could be harmful for both the investigation of
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fossils
and the development of science. Which the professor talks about the same topic, they hold
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different
positions, and the professor
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explains
her opinions
specifically
.

Firstly
, as suggested in the
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reading
article,
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private
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collections
could forbid the public to
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see
the
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fossils
and
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let
them
finally
lose their curiosity of ancient
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fossils
.
However
, the presenter argues that it is the
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private
collectors who
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has
been increasing the exposure of
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fossils
to
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people
, while the
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collections
belongs to schools and public institutions do not
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allowed
to
be exhibited
in front of the public.

Moreover
, the
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reading
states the concern of
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private
commercial collectors with limited knowledge about
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fossil
could waste the scientific source and
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leave
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some
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important
discoveries unachievable. In fact, the lecture introduces in
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details
that a basic procedure
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before
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fossils
becoming valuable is letting scientific experts examine them and dig the whole information of them
first
.
Hence
, the worry in the
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reading
passage is unreasonable and unnecessary at all.

Finally
, in the
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reading
, it worries about
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some
information might be missing forever since
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private
collectors
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often
damage the position messages from
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fossils
when they were laying underground.
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But
the professor believes that we have gained more in commercial diggings than loss,
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because
most of the
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fossils
was exposed
to the surface by
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private
sectors. Universities and scientific institutions have
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little
power in finding
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fossils
, more evidence would be completely undiscovered if the
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private
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collection
was forbidden
.
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IELTS essay In the reading passage, it is indicated that the commercialization of fossil discoveries and collections could be harmful for both the investigation of fossils and the development of science.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6.0
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