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In the past important knowledge of culture and history was stored in museum Nowadays information is freely available on internet therefore is no longer need for museum To what extent do you agree or disagree

In the past important knowledge of culture and history was stored in museum Nowadays information is freely available on internet therefore is no longer need for museum jKAM
In the retrospect essential knowledge of culture and history was stored in museum, whereas, these days due to all these information are freely present on internet. As a result, many people believe that there is no longer need for museum. This essay disagrees because museums preserve authentic values of ancient artworks, and sometimes internet gives inaccurate information about these artworks. In museums, people can observe closely and feel all renowned paintings, sculptures and other form of artworks. They can feel it by emotionally and physically which make then remember it longer than any other way. For instance, according to an one survey Monalisa Painting, which is one of the most famous and renowned artwork done by a famous artist, has visitors doubled than five decades ago, in order to observe closely. Furthermore, internet provides abundant knowledge about almost everything. People can visit internet again and again. However, all these information are found spurious and inaccurate because all these information could be filled by any technicians and may be by ordinary people. As a result, all information about all the ancient artworks are not precisely as they claimed. For instance, according to an one study, Dello Mello Painting which was originally painted by Mr. Richard Danllo. But till 2018, the internet has given false information regarding the name of this artist. According to the internet this painting was introduced by Mr Dallnello, who was a physician. In conclusion, in museums people get close look, and remember all the cognative information about this artworks a long time, and due to the lack of Information about the history and culture which are ample of present on internet. Consequences, this essay is disagree that there is no longer need for museums because all these information are freely available on Internet
In the retrospect essential knowledge of culture and history
was stored
in
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museum
, whereas, these days due to all these
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information
are
freely
present on internet.
As a result
,
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many
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people
believe that there is no longer need for
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museum
. This essay disagrees
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because
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museums
preserve authentic values of ancient
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artworks
, and
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sometimes
internet gives inaccurate
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information
about these artworks.

In
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museums
,
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people
can observe
closely
and feel all renowned
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paintings
, sculptures and other form of
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artworks
. They can feel it by
emotionally
and
physically
which
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make
then remember it longer than any other way.
For instance
, according to
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an
one survey
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Monalisa
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Painting
, which is one of the most
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famous
and renowned
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artwork
done by a
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famous
artist, has visitors
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doubled
than five decades ago, in order to observe
closely
.

Furthermore
, internet provides abundant knowledge about almost everything.
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People
can visit internet again and again.
However
, all these
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information
are found
spurious and inaccurate
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
all these
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information
could
be filled
by any technicians and may be by ordinary
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people
.
As a result
, all
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information
about all the ancient
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artworks
are not
precisely
as they claimed.
For instance
, according to
Use "a" instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
an
one study,
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Dello
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Mello
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Painting
which was
originally
painted by Mr. Richard
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Danllo
.
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But
till 2018, the internet has
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given
false
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information
regarding the name of this artist. According to the internet this
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painting
was introduced
by Mr
Possible spelling mistake found.
Dallnello
, who was a physician.

In conclusion
, in
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museums
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people
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get
close look, and remember all the
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cognative
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information
about
Did you mean "these"?
this
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artworks
a long time, and due to the lack of
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Information
about the history and culture which are ample of present on internet. Consequences, this essay is disagree that there is no longer need for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museums
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
all these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
are
freely
available on Internet
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IELTS essay In the past important knowledge of culture and history was stored in museum Nowadays information is freely available on internet therefore is no longer need for museum

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  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6.0
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