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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? gpMa
The world's biggest problem nowadays remains the ratio of the starving population. Several hundred years ago it had reasonable causes, such as poor agriculture technologies and little scientific progress, although it appears debatable now. This essay will discuss possible reasons and probable solution for this issue. The capitalistic present world continues to extend the gap between developed and developing countries, along with the one between poor and rich people, where the latter contains less than 1% of the world population. The gap leads to poor countries becoming poorer, since the world corporations steal fossils, as it happens in Africa, or labor, like it is in China, therefore the vicious circle happens due to the inability of countries of the third world to become richer. Additionally, leading nations like the USA or Russia create conflicts that end up with wars, which also have harmful effects. The main thing society can do to slow down the problem of world hunger is to invest in charity funds, in spite of its ineffectiveness in long term. The middle class is not able to change the world fully and to make everyone equal right now. The manufacturers need to begin conscious consumption and production, for example, produce as much food as the population of developed countries demands since all the waste products are not utilized to feed people, who can not afford it. In conclusion, the issue appeared due to structural changes of the whole world, thus its best solution will be also obtained from other ones. The only option that remained to people from the middle class is to offer money to charities and have an active position.
The world's biggest problem nowadays remains the ratio of the starving population. Several hundred years ago it had reasonable causes, such as poor agriculture technologies and
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little
scientific progress, although it appears debatable
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now
. This essay will discuss possible reasons and probable solution for this issue.

The capitalistic present
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world
continues to extend the gap between developed and developing
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countries
, along with the one between poor and rich
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people
, where the latter contains less than 1% of the
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world
population. The gap leads to poor
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countries
becoming poorer, since the
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world
corporations steal fossils, as it happens in Africa, or labor, like it is in China,
therefore
the vicious circle happens due to the inability of
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countries
of the third
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world
to become richer.
Additionally
, leading nations like the USA or Russia create conflicts that
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end
up with wars, which
also
have harmful effects.

The main thing society can do to slow down the problem of
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world
hunger is to invest in charity funds,
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in spite of
its ineffectiveness in long term. The middle
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class
is not able to
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change
the
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world
fully
and to
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make
everyone equal right
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now
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
manufacturers need to
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begin
conscious consumption and production,
for example
, produce as much food as the population of developed
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countries
demands since all the waste products are not utilized to feed
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people
, who can not afford it.

In conclusion
, the issue appeared due to structural
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changes
of the whole
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world
,
thus
its best solution will be
also
obtained from other ones. The
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only
option that remained to
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people
from the middle
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class
is to offer money to charities and have an active position.
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IELTS essay In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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