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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve if they tried hard enough.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve if they tried hard enough. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message? Ng7m
It is always said that, the younger generations does not have any limits and they can able to attain anything if they are ready to push their limits. This essay looks into several advantages and disadvantages of this phenomenon. The main advantage of the children getting forced from their parents to achieve a particular task was their improved performance and their increased dedication. The children who listens their motivating words from their guardians tends to show a magnificent level of performance because they are not getting distracted towards any other things but only concentrating towards their hardwork to achieve a goal. In their mindset, there was no limits and they are thinking that their hardwork will be paid off. The motivation of parents also improves their attitude towards attaining something. They will become ready to go harder and harder on their journey to success despite of all other challenges. The main disadvantage of the parents enforcement of their children to the accomplishment of various tasks will leads to the lack of their physical and mental health. The children who are prone to hear the need for Completion of a particular thing from their parents everyday tend to work harder despite of thinking about their physical wellness. They may not be interested to take a balanced diet that is essential for their growth needs. They will also exhibit a great mental agitation, as their minds was only concentrated on the achievement of the task told by their parents. This will lack them on their social and personal abilities. In a nutshell, the future generations will be greatly benefitted from their parents motivation to push their limits by exhibiting premium levels of performance and their increased dedicstion towards task completion. But it may affect their overall physical and mental wellness in a dangerous manner.
It is always said that, the younger generations does not have any
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limits and
they
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can able to
attain anything if they are ready to push their
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limits
. This essay looks into several advantages and disadvantages of this phenomenon.

The main advantage of the
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children
getting forced from their
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parents
to achieve a particular
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task
was their
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improved
performance and their increased dedication. The
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children
who
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listens
their motivating words from their guardians tends to
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show
a magnificent level of performance
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because
they are not getting distracted towards any other things
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but
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only
concentrating towards their
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hardwork
to achieve a goal. In their mindset, there was no
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limits
and they are thinking that their
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hardwork
will
be paid
off. The motivation of
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parents
also
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improves
their attitude towards attaining something. They will become ready to go harder and harder on their journey to success
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despite of
all other challenges.

The main disadvantage of the
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parents
enforcement of their
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children
to the accomplishment of various
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tasks
will leads to the lack of their physical and mental health. The
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children
who are prone to hear the need
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for


Completion of a particular thing from their
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parents
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everyday
tend to work harder
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despite of
thinking about their physical wellness. They may not
be interested
to take a balanced diet
that is
essential for their growth needs. They will
also
exhibit a great mental agitation, as their minds was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
concentrated on the achievement of the
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task
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
by their
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parents
. This will lack them on their social and personal abilities.

In a nutshell, the future generations will be
greatly
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benefitted
from their
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parents
motivation to push their
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limits
by exhibiting premium levels of performance and their increased
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dedicstion
towards
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task
completion.
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But
it may affect their
overall
physical and mental wellness in a
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dangerous
manner.
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IELTS essay In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve if they tried hard enough. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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