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Each year crime rate increase. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity.

Each year crime rate increase. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity. JGB0
There is no denying the crime rate have been increasing day by day and year by year. This is happening because of numerous reasons. There are a lot of causes and number of necessary solutions to reduce this problem. To begin with, there are a few reasons of committing crime by people. Firstly, there are various people who are unemployed but they are well educated and have passed their graduation. They have a lack of job opportunities because of heavy competitions of job that are available. Therefore, they do crime and they earn money for their livelihoods. There are universal needs whic they have to fulfill but they are unable to complete their needs, as they are jobless. In addition to this, some individuals do that crimes that are not appropriate. For instance, a recent incident about the kidnap of a child which have printed in a newspaper for a sum of 1 crore and the person who has done the crime was an engineer graduate. He did because he had no occupation related to work, as he deem that it was a precise way to earn money. Moreover, there are myriad of ways to techle this problem. First and foremost, it is a responsibility of higher authorities that they should provide the education among the students without any hard competitions. This is because that they can learn good or moral values of a healthy lifestyle in a young age. Although they should do assiduous for their study but pupils do not reckon that its an competition and it is mandatory that they have to demonstrate that they are very well from whole class room. It is an accurate way to alleviate this problem. Another way is government ought to give jo after completing graduation for their livelihoods. Due to this, they could receive a basic salary to run their family. Their future will not devastrate as well as it will also reduce the formidable which they have to face because of joblessness. To conclude, although there are several crime rates are increased due to lack of education and job facility, nevertheless if there is provision regarding job so it will definitely reduce unemployment.
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crime
rate have been increasing day by day and year by year. This is happening
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because
of numerous reasons. There are
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a lot of
causes and number of necessary solutions to
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reduce
this problem. To
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begin
with, there are a few reasons of committing
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crime
by
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people
.
Firstly
, there are various
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people
who
are unemployed
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but
they are
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well educated
and have passed their graduation. They have a lack of
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job
opportunities
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because
of heavy competitions of
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job
that are available.
Therefore
, they do
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crime and
they earn money for their livelihoods. There are universal needs
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whic
they
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have to
fulfill
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but
they are unable to complete their needs, as they are jobless.
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to this,
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some
individuals do that
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crimes
that are not appropriate.
For instance
, a recent incident about the kidnap of a child which have printed in a newspaper for a sum of 1 crore and the person who has done the
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crime
was an engineer graduate. He did
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because
he had no occupation related to work, as he
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deem
that it was a precise way to earn money.
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, there are myriad of ways to
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techle
this problem.
First
and foremost, it is a responsibility of higher authorities that they should provide the education among the students without any
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hard
competitions. This is
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because
that they can learn
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good
or moral values of a healthy lifestyle in a young age. Although they should do assiduous for their study
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but
pupils do not reckon that its
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competition and it is mandatory that they
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have to
demonstrate that they are
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very
well from whole
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class
room. It is an accurate way to alleviate this problem. Another way is
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government
ought to give
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jo
after completing graduation for their livelihoods. Due to this, they could receive a basic salary to run their family. Their future will not
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devastrate
as well
as it will
also
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reduce
the formidable which they
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have to
face
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because
of joblessness.
To conclude
, although there are several
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crime
rates
are increased
due to lack of education and
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job
facility,
nevertheless
if there is provision regarding
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job
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so
it will definitely
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reduce
unemployment.
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IELTS essay Each year crime rate increase. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity.

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