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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In many countries especially in Asia, a lot of children are taught that they can achieve anything if they tried hard enough. This message means a lot to them because they grow by following their parent’s word. In my opinion, this message has taught them to be ambitious and motivated them to get what they want. However, life is not perfect, sometimes too much effort could change into pressure and children might lose their childhood because of their tiredness.

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