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In some countries people are possible to have a wide variety of foods have been transported all over the world 2

In some countries people are possible to have a wide variety of foods have been transported all over the world 2 LrAoK
It is opined that in few countries individual have a wide range of food varities which have been supplied globally. This essay will discuss both the advantage and disadvantage of this development in the following perspective. To embark with the benefits, first and foremost is globalisation, through import and export the relationship between the nation's would be strong, this would upsurge the demand of labours also and unemployment would be alleviate. Secondly, this development boost the level of economy owing to the addition of taxes along with the food and this will enhance the income of government. Last but not least, due to this people have a huge variety of food to eat according to their taste moreover they could try the new food daily. Along with the benefits the drawbacks of this development could not be neglected, this food is very expensive due to the taxes and every person could not afford it so the consumption of people decreases. In addition to it, sometimes the transportation of food is delay so the food might not be remain fresh or safe to eat, this would be harmful for people's health. Furthermore, sometime due to this the local farmers face alot of issues because people don't prefer to eat the local products that would impact on their businesses. To conclude, although this development have some drawbacks yet the transportation of food gives people alot of opportunities or source of income.
It
is opined
that in few countries individual have a wide range of
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food
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varities
which have
been supplied
globally. This essay will discuss both the advantage and disadvantage of this
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development
The usual preposition for "perspective" is "from" not "in." "from the following perspective".
in the following perspective
. To embark with the benefits,
first
and foremost is
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globalisation
, through import and export the relationship between the nation's would be strong, this would upsurge the demand of
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labours
also
and unemployment would be
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alleviate
.
Secondly
, this
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development
boost the level of economy owing to the addition of taxes along with the
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food
and this will enhance the income of
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government
. Last
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but
not least, due to this
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people
have a huge variety of
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food
to eat according to their taste
moreover
they could try the new
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food
daily. Along with the benefits the drawbacks of this
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development
could not
be neglected
, this
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food
is
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very
expensive due to the taxes and every person could not afford it
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so
the consumption of
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people
decreases.
In addition
to it,
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sometimes
the transportation of
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food
is delay
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so
the
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food
might not be
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remain
fresh or safe to eat, this would be harmful for
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people
's health.
Furthermore
, sometime due to this the local farmers face
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alot
of issues
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because
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people
don't prefer to eat the local products that would impact on their businesses.
To conclude
, although this
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development
have
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some
drawbacks
yet
the transportation of
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food
gives
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people
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alot
of opportunities or source of income.
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IELTS essay In some countries people are possible to have a wide variety of foods have been transported all over the world 2

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
239 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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