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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Certainly, there are countries which to be an owner of a house is a trend that predominant more than to be a renter. I think that have a home is more positive than negative. Let me explain more about this issue. First of all, owning a home is a goal of life for many people. I think this aspect is connected with our culture as a Chileans because for much time (in previous years) the population did not have any access or facilities to buy a house. But, as time has gone by, people have had more opportunities for getting a home. Nowadays, however, people need to save a large amount of money to have a living place. As a result, It could be a long process, because is necessary to be constant and, sometimes (even my experience) people must stop spending money in other propose than could not be a priority. It might be a negative situation. On the other hand, as far as I concerned, invert in an owning home is an inversion for the future. For example, as a hypothetical situation, If I did not have any place where I live (when I will be 80 years old), I would get rent a home. As a consequence, I should spend a lot of my salary as a retired. Also, (in this country at least) is extremely difficult has an decent old age, owing to pensions do not allow to live comfortably. Thus, I think that could be a terrible decision never have thought before in these horrible repercussions. In conclusion, I believe that obtaining a home is a very relevant aim for some people. Therefore, I think that is an important objective to get.
Certainly
, there are countries which to be an owner of a
house
is a trend that predominant more than to be a renter. I
think
that have a home is more
positive
than
negative
.
Let
me
explain
more about this issue.

First of all
, owning a home is a goal of life for
many
people
. I
think
this aspect
is connected
with our culture as
a Chileans
because
for much time (in previous years) the population did not have any access or facilities to
buy
a
house
.
But
, as time has gone by,
people
have had more opportunities for getting a home. Nowadays,
however
,
people
need to save a large amount of money to have a living place.
As a result
, It could be a long process,
because
is necessary to be constant and,
sometimes
(even my experience)
people
must
stop
spending money in other propose than could not be a priority. It might be a
negative
situation.

On the other hand
, as far as I concerned, invert in an owning home is an inversion for the future.
For example
, as a hypothetical situation, If I did not have any place where I
live
(when I will be 80 years
old
), I would
get
rent a home. As a consequence, I should spend
a lot of
my salary as a retired.
Also
, (in this country at least) is
extremely
difficult has
an
decent
old
age, owing to pensions do not
allow
to
live
comfortably
.
Thus
, I
think
that could be a terrible decision never have
thought
before
in these horrible repercussions.

In conclusion
, I believe that obtaining a home is a
very
relevant aim for
some
people
.
Therefore
, I
think
that is
an
important
objective to
get
.
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IELTS essay In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
6.0
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