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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alonenowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negativedevelopment? v.1

In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alonenowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negativedevelopment? v. 1
During the past years, a disputable matter has risen by the increasing rate of abortion cases. Some believe that termination of pregnancy should be legalised to protect the mother's safety from risky procedures, while others disagree and compare abortion to a crime. On the one hand, having a law which legitimate abortion will decrease the unwanted circumstances of an illegal abortion. In other words, women who have the right to access clinics legally to terminate an unwanted pregnancy, will have a safe an advanced procedure compared to the illegal process that uses painful and risky methods. As a result, Maternal injuries and death rates caused by the unsafe and illegal abortions will decrease. This fact is evidenced by the rate of woman dying in the process of an abortion decreasing after legalizing abortion in the USA. On the other hand, there are people who are against abortion completely and consider it a crime. Some think that abortion is simply killing a human being, meaning that the parent is defying god wishes. Rather, they argue that instead of aborting, they should put the baby for adoption to help the incapable parent to have children on their own. Various developing countries, for example, encourage the pregnant individuals and help them emotionally and medically during their pregnancies to avoid abortion. In my opinion, I think that abortion should be authorised in some unwanted situation such as rape. However, in other situations, facilities and doctors should aware the parent and introduce other options to prevent abortion. In conclusion, terminating a pregnancy is nowadays a debatable matter, where some agree that authorising the process will decrease the rate of harm resulting from the illegal and brutal adoption while others describe it as a crime. For me, I am convinced that abortion should be legal in specific situations, but spreading awarness is also a necessity to provide other options.
During the past years, a disputable matter has risen by the increasing
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rate
of
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abortion
cases.
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Some
believe that termination of pregnancy should be
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legalised
to protect the mother's safety from risky procedures, while others disagree and compare
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abortion
to a crime.

On the one hand, having a law which legitimate
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abortion
will decrease the unwanted circumstances of an
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illegal
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abortion
. In
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other
words, women who have the right to access clinics
legally
to terminate an unwanted pregnancy, will have a safe an advanced procedure compared to the
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illegal
process that
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uses
painful and risky methods.
As a result
, Maternal injuries and death
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rates
caused by the unsafe and
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illegal
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abortions
will decrease. This fact
is evidenced
by the
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rate
of woman dying in the process of an
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abortion
decreasing after
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legalizing
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abortion
in the USA.

On the
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other
hand, there are
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people
who are against
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abortion
completely and consider it a crime.
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Some
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think
that
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abortion
is
simply
killing a human being, meaning that the parent is defying god wishes.
Rather
, they argue that
instead
of aborting, they should put the baby for adoption to
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help
the incapable parent to have children on their
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own
. Various
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developing countries
,
for example
, encourage the pregnant individuals and
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help
them
emotionally
and
medically
during their pregnancies to avoid abortion.

In my opinion, I
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think
that
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abortion
should be
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authorised
in
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some
unwanted situation such as rape.
However
, in
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other
situations, facilities and doctors should aware the parent and introduce
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other
options to
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prevent
abortion.

In conclusion
, terminating a pregnancy is nowadays a debatable matter, where
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some
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agree
that
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authorising
the process will decrease the
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rate
of harm resulting from the
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illegal
and brutal adoption while others
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describe
it as a crime. For me, I
am convinced
that
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abortion
should be legal in specific situations,
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but
spreading
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awarness
is
also
a necessity to provide
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other
options.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alonenowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negativedevelopment? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
313 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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