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In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing people feel lesssafe then ever before.what do you think the causes of this problems and measures should be taken to solve it.

There is no blinking at the fact that various kind of crimes have spread in some countries but recently they have tackled some really dangerous crimes such target killing, booms etc. However, in this essay I will discuss some of my approaches about this matter as well as problems and solutions. First and foremost, various sort of crimes increase due to some reasons for instance, when the rate of illiteracy increase at large scale. Secondly, when government not take serious these all issues and not do some efforts to overcome these evils. Besides, cooperation count a lots in this matters therefore, when public would not cooperate with the government then obviously situation would become more acute. Neverthless, there are a number solutions that can address these all crimes. First, government should be strengthening because only strong government can solve these all problems effectively. Secondly, the literacy rate should be increase because merely educated people can aware these all problems. Thirdly, public must be made feel their responsibility they should take keen interest in the affair of country. In addition, the concept of national consolidation should be lunched because only national unity which can make their future bright and brilliant. Last but not least religions always play a vital role in the affairs of countries so they can play part in this matter. From my perspective, i personally believe that some crimes have decreased but still people have threat because they passed in bad situations despite of this there are lots of other crimes which are also terrible for human lives. Such as, kidnapping for ransoms, madder, theft etc. To sum up, in light of the fact that people are still not safe their lives therefore, its really essential to tackle these all crimes immediately so that people life's get more safe, and they can live a peaceful life's.
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crimes
have spread in
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some
countries
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but
recently they have tackled
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some
really
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dangerous
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crimes
such target killing, booms etc.
However
, in this essay I will discuss
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some
of my approaches about this matter
as well
as problems and solutions.

First
and foremost, various sort of
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crimes
increase due to
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some
reasons
for instance
, when the rate of illiteracy increase at large scale.
Secondly
, when
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government
not take serious these all issues and not do
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some
efforts to overcome these evils.
Besides
, cooperation count
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a lots
in this matters
therefore
, when public would not cooperate with the
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government
then
obviously
situation would become more acute.
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Neverthless
, there are a
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number
solutions that can address these all crimes.

First
,
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government
should be strengthening
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because
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only
strong
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government
can solve these all problems
effectively
.
Secondly
, the literacy rate should be increase
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because
merely
educated
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people
can aware these all problems.
Thirdly
, public
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must
be made
feel their responsibility they should take keen interest in the affair of country.
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, the concept of national consolidation should
be lunched
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because
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only
national unity which can
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make
their future bright and brilliant. Last
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but
not
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least
religions always play a vital role in the affairs of countries
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so
they can play part in this matter.

From my perspective,
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i
personally
believe that
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some
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crimes
have decreased
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but
still
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people
have threat
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because
they passed in
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bad
situations
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despite of
this there are lots of other
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crimes
which are
also
terrible for human
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lives
. Such as, kidnapping for ransoms, madder, theft etc.

To sum up, in light of the fact that
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people
are
still
not safe their
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lives
therefore
, its
really
essential to tackle these all
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crimes
immediately
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so
that
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people
life's
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get
more safe, and they can
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live
a peaceful life's.
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IELTS essay In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing people feel lesssafe then ever before. what do you think the causes of this problems and measures should be taken to solve it.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
308 words
6.0
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