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In some countries celebrities complain about the way media publicize their private lives. Some people say that they should accept it as part of their fame. Do you agree or disagree.

In some countries celebrities complain about the way media publicize their private lives. Some people say that they should accept it as part of their fame. XrEw
In certain parts of worlds, there are some celebrities who often complains about how media use their private lives as a media content. Some people argues that because of their fame celebrities should accept it. But I completely disagree with this opinion and think that celebrities have their own personal life as any other human and we have to respect their own privacy. First of all, due to high popularity and fame, some of the fans are become curios about getting news of their favorite celebrities. Because of this, some news channels take an advantage of the situation and monitor each and every movement of the celebrities as well as make a coverage regarding their daily life. For instance, when any celebrity go out for a lunch or meet somebody from their fields, news reporters generally make an assumption and misinform their viewers which many harm celebrity's image among their loving followers. Thus, it's more important to understand celebrity's concern about their personal life. Moreover, sometimes media take any small issue to very high pace for their popularity. They take an advantage of any public figure, who is facing issues in their personal life, for channel's personal interest. For example, recently in India Bollywood star Sushant Singh Rajput had committed suicide which was a news but due to public interest for this topic, news channels made it breaking news as well as they also criticized his ex-girlfriend and eventually this incident ruined her career. That's why media should respect their privacy as well as they should understand that they have their own life after their work. To conclude, I strongly believe that celebrities have their own life after their profession. They have all the rights like us to enjoy their own personal space.
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content.
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of their fame
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celebrities
should accept it.
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as any other
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human and
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respect their
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privacy.

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, due to high popularity and fame,
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are become
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news
of their favorite
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celebrities
.
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,
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channels take an advantage of the situation and monitor each and every movement of the
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celebrities
as well
as
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make
a coverage regarding their daily
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life
.
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celebrity
go out
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for a lunch
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meet
somebody from their fields,
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reporters
generally
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make
an assumption and misinform their viewers which
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many harm
celebrity's image among their loving followers.
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, it's more
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important
to understand celebrity's concern about their
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personal
life.

Moreover
,
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media
take any
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issue to
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high pace for their popularity. They take an advantage of any public figure, who is facing issues in their
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personal
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life
, for channel's
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personal
interest.
For example
, recently in India Bollywood star
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Sushant
Singh
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Rajput
had committed suicide which was a
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news
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but
due to public interest for this topic,
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news
channels made it breaking
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news
as well
as they
also
criticized his ex-girlfriend and
eventually
this incident ruined her career. That's why
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media
should respect their privacy
as well
as they should understand that they have their
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own
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life
after their work.

To conclude
, I
strongly
believe that
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celebrities
have their
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own
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life
after their profession. They have all the rights like us to enjoy their
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own
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personal
space.
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IELTS essay In some countries celebrities complain about the way media publicize their private lives. Some people say that they should accept it as part of their fame.

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