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in recent years,the number of crimes commited by young people in major cities throughout the world is increasing.discuss this issue .give reasons and solution .

in recent years, the number of crimes commited by young people in major cities throughout the world is increasing. discuss this issue. give reasons and solution. 9XAx
Crime is one of the majour issue in today's life. In large cities young individules commit crimes which increases day by day. Thiss essay will discuss not only reasons but also solutions in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, nowadays crime is increasing from which people are scare to go out. There are various reasons of this. First and foremost reason is unemployment which lead to crime. People are not getting jobs after donig their studies because of which they does not satisfy there needs for which they do thift. Moreover, by commiting small crimes they started doing big crimes such as kidnaping for money or murder. Secondly, some people commite crime again and again because society do not accept them. For example, sometimes there is no fauglt of the persone who is having punishment of that crime which is done by some one else. Due to which they become crimilal in the eyes of society and they do not accept that person because of which that person want to take revange from that person who is responcibal for that crime which lead to another crime. At last, young incividuals have high angre they cannot listen single bad word for them because of which they start fight and in some time it took face of crime. Meanwhile, there are numarious solution to this problum. Firstly, government should provide employment with handsome salary to young people from which they do not have time to think about any other think. Secondly, society should give one chance to people who commite crime may be they become good persone in their life after complete their punishment at jail. Moreover, young children shoud control their selfs to do small mistakes by which can sidestep the crime. In conclusion, most of the crimes are done because peopel do not satisfy their essential needs. So government should provide jobs to those who are unemployed.
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Crime
is one of the
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majour
issue in
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today
's life. In large cities
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young
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individules
commit
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crimes
which increases day by day.
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Thiss
essay will discuss not
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only
reasons
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but
also
solutions in upcoming paragraphs.

To commence with, nowadays
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crime
is increasing from which
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people
are scare to go out. There are various reasons of this.
First
and foremost reason is unemployment which lead to
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crime
.
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People
are not getting jobs after
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donig
their studies
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because
of which they
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does
not satisfy there needs for which they do
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thift
.
Moreover
, by
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commiting
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small
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crimes
they
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started
doing
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big
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crimes
such as
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kidnaping
for money or murder.
Secondly
,
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some
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people
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commite
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crime
again and again
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because
society do not accept them.
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,
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sometimes
there is no
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fauglt
of the
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persone
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who
is having punishment of that
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crime
which
is done
by
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some one
else. Due to which they become
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crimilal
in the eyes of
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society and
they do not accept that
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person
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because
of which that
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person
want to take
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revange
from that
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person
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who
is
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responcibal
for that
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crime
which lead to another
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crime
. At last,
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young
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incividuals
have high
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angre
they cannot listen single
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bad
word for them
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because
of which they
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start
fight and in
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some
time it took face of crime.

Meanwhile, there are
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numarious
solution to this
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.
Firstly
,
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government
should provide employment with handsome salary to
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young
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people
from which they do not have time to
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think
about any other
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think
.
Secondly
, society should give one chance to
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people
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who
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commite
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crime
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may be
they become
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good
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persone
in their life after complete their punishment at jail.
Moreover
,
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young
children
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shoud
control their
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selfs
to do
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small
mistakes by which can sidestep the crime.

In conclusion
, most of the
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crimes
are done
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because
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peopel
do not satisfy their essential needs.
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So
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government
should provide jobs to those
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who
are unemployed
.
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IELTS essay in recent years, the number of crimes commited by young people in major cities throughout the world is increasing. discuss this issue. give reasons and solution.

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