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In recent years, television has contributed most to changing people’s quality of life . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The invention of television has changed drastically numerous aspects of life. The most people believe that TV has provided a plethora of valuable information and entertainment people which has improved the standard of living, I completely agree with this statement due to a number of reasons. To begin with, there are the number of reasons for it. First and foremost reason is that television provide information about the current issues. There are several channel give adequate knowledge for viewers all around the world. People have a chance to know range of news of different countries that help them get aware about the problems. To illustrate nowadays individual frequently get information about the rates of COVID-19 pandemic via their small screen in their homes. Secondly, TV also set depicts about nations' cultures and traditions. because of this people can learn about cultures as well as histories, including their national food and activity. Not only it represents the attire and food, but also speak religion languages. Finally television is one of the sources for entertainment. To explain further TV is flooded entertainment shows which have a posktive impact for human's attitude. Apart from this people are living stressful life in which they need a sense of relaxation. By watching comedy and drama individuals get relief from it. To conclude, I support this view wholeheartedly and the reasons behind this is that television provides all information about everything passing traditional values to the young generations and it is a mode of intertainment.
The invention of
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has
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changed
drastically
numerous aspects of life. The most
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people
believe that TV has provided a plethora of valuable
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information
and

entertainment
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people
which has
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improved
the standard of living, I completely
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agree
with this statement due to a number of reasons.

To
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begin
with, there are the number of reasons for it.
First
and foremost reason is that
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television
provide
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information
about the
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current
issues. There are several
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channel
give adequate knowledge for viewers all around the world.
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People
have a chance to know range of news of
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different
countries that
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help
them
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get
aware about the problems. To illustrate nowadays individual
frequently
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get
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information
about the rates of COVID-19 pandemic via their
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small
screen in their homes.

Secondly
, TV
also
set depicts about nations' cultures and traditions.
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because
of this
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people
can learn about
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cultures


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as
well as histories, including their national food and activity. Not
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only
it represents the attire and food,
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but
also
speak religion languages.

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Finally
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television
is one of the sources for entertainment. To
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explain
further
TV
is flooded
entertainment
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shows
which have a
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posktive
impact for human's attitude. Apart from this
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people
are living stressful life in which they need a sense of relaxation. By watching comedy and drama individuals
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get
relief from it.

To conclude
, I support this view
wholeheartedly
and the reasons behind this is that
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television
provides all
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information
about everything passing traditional values to the young
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generations and
it is a mode of
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intertainment
.
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IELTS essay In recent years, television has contributed most to changing people’s quality of life.

Essay
  American English
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249 words
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