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In my opinion, men and women should have the same educational opportunities. However, I do not agree with the idea of accepting equal proportions of each gender

In my opinion, men and women should have the same educational opportunities. However, I do not agree with the idea of accepting equal proportions of each gender pa10D
In my opinion, men and women should have the same educational opportunities. However, I do not agree with the idea of accepting equal proportions of each gender in every university subject. Having the same number of men and women on all degree courses is simply unrealistic. Student numbers on any course depend on the applications that the institution receives. If a university decided to fill courses with equal numbers of males and females, it would need enough applicants of each gender. In reality, many courses are more popular with one gender than the other, and it would not be practical to aim for equal proportions. For example, nursing courses tend to attract more female applicants, and it would be difficult to fill these courses if fifty per cent of the places needed to go to males. Apart from the practical concerns expressed above, I also believe that it would be unfair to base admission to university courses on gender. Universities should continue to select the best candidates for each course according to their qualifications. In this way, both men and women have the same opportunities, and applicants know that they will be successful if they work hard to achieve good grades at school. If a female student is the best candidate for a place on a course, it would be wrong to reject her in favour of a male student with lower grades or fewer qualifications. In conclusion, the selection of university students should be based on merit, and it would be both impractical and unfair to change to a selection procedure based on gender.
In my opinion,
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men
and women should have the same educational opportunities.

However
, I do not
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agree
with the
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idea
of accepting equal proportions of each gender

in every
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university
subject.

Having the same number of
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men
and women on all degree
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courses
is
simply


unrealistic. Student numbers on any
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course
depend on the applications that the

institution receives. If a
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university
decided to fill
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courses
with equal numbers of males

and females, it would need
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enough
applicants of each gender. In reality,
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many
courses

are more popular with one gender than the other, and it would not be practical to aim

for equal proportions.
For example
, nursing
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courses
tend to attract more female

applicants, and it would be difficult to fill these
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courses
if fifty per cent of the places

needed to go to males.

Apart from the practical concerns expressed above, I
also
believe that it would be

unfair to base admission to
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university
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courses
on gender.
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Universities
should continue

to select the best candidates for each
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course
according to their qualifications. In this

way, both
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men
and women have the same opportunities, and applicants know that

they will be successful if they work
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hard
to achieve
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good
grades at school. If a female

student is the best candidate for a place on a
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course
, it would be
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wrong
to reject her in

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favour
of a male student with lower grades or fewer qualifications.

In conclusion
, the selection of
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university
students should
be based
on merit, and it

would be both impractical and unfair to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
to a selection procedure based on

gender.
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IELTS essay In my opinion, men and women should have the same educational opportunities. However, I do not agree with the idea of accepting equal proportions of each gender

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