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In most countries prisons are popular actions against people who do crime. However, educating people against crimes can be more effective solution. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In most countries prisons are popular actions against people who do crime. However, educating people against crimes can be more effective solution. BJ5na
Majority of countries are in favour that prison is the most effective solution for criminals, while others believe that providing education to them would be more beneficial. I personally partially agree with this notion, prison is the best solutions for hardcore criminals such as rapist and serial killer, however, for minor criminals like shoplifting and juvenile crime can be reduced by educating them. To begin with, criminals who commit serious crime should be sent to prisons. People who engaged in crimes such as serial killing, rapist, kidnapper and drug traffickers should be rewarded with hard sentences as these activities are not minor and these people have not righted to walk freely on streets. Educating them would be a waste of resources as they have enough experience in that, they enjoy these crimes and only do them for money. Therefore, by sending them to prison is the only prominent solution for the government to tackle this crime down. On the other hand, providing counselling and education assistance to criminals who commit minor crimes such as shoplifting, robbery and traffic rules violence could be decreased. These illegal activities emerged due to lack of education and proper parental supervision, such crimes might be alleviated if they can be noticed from an early age in children. For example, it has been noticed that if students are taught with self-discipline and self-esteem they are less likely to be involved in crimes. To conclude, culprits with dangerous activities should be sent to jails, however, other minor crimes could be mitigated with the help of parents and government awareness campaigns. From my perspective, these two types of criminals can be treated differently according to their crime and background credentials.
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prison
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criminals
, while others believe that providing education to them would be more beneficial. I
personally
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agree
with this notion,
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prison
is the best solutions for hardcore
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criminals
such as rapist and serial killer,
however
, for
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minor
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criminals
like shoplifting and juvenile
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crime
can be
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reduced
by educating them.

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criminals
who commit serious
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crime
should be
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sent
to
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prisons
.
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who engaged in
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crimes
such as serial killing, rapist, kidnapper and drug traffickers should
be rewarded
with
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hard
sentences as these activities are not
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minor
and these
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people
have not righted to walk
freely
on streets. Educating them would be a waste of resources as they have
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enough
experience in that, they enjoy these
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crimes
and
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only
do them for money.
Therefore
, by sending them to
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prison
is the
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only
prominent solution for the
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government
to tackle this
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crime
down.

On the other hand
, providing counselling and education assistance to
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criminals
who commit
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minor
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crimes
such as shoplifting, robbery and traffic
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rules
violence could
be decreased
. These illegal activities emerged due to lack of education and proper parental supervision, such
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crimes
might
be alleviated
if they can
be noticed
from an early age in children.
For example
, it has
been noticed
that if students
are taught
with self-discipline and self-esteem they are less likely to
be involved
in crimes.

To conclude
, culprits with
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dangerous
activities should be
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sent
to jails,
however
, other
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minor
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crimes
could
be mitigated
with the
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help
of parents and
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government
awareness campaigns. From my perspective, these two types of
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criminals
can
be treated
differently
according to their
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crime
and background credentials.
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IELTS essay In most countries prisons are popular actions against people who do crime. However, educating people against crimes can be more effective solution.

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