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In many countries, prison is the most common solution for crimes. However, many think that better education is the most effective way to prevent from committing further crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries, prison is the most common solution for crimes. However, many think that better education is the most effective way to prevent from committing further crime. Jx75
In a number of nations, it is common to send criminals to jails to prevent crimes. But some people believe that it is better to educate people to restrain them from committing offenses. I largely agree with the given statement as effective literary skills can prevent motivation for typical offenses, but they may fail to address certain crimes such as online crimes and hacking. First of all, it is an ineffective education which is responsible for unemployment. Without education and knowledge, it is hard to get jobs. Consequently, these uneducated people indulge in criminal activities such as robbery and killing others for money. Had they received a good education, they would be employed and need not resort to such illegal and immoral acts. Secondly, often educated people live in a community with other educated and productive people. They share nice thoughts and work toward the positive development of self and others. When people are engaged in productive activities they automatically have no time to think of criminal acts or perform crimes. Undoubtedly, this is also true that not all crimes can be prevented by promising education as some of the most famous criminals have been master's degree holders and working in reputed companies in outstanding positions. For example, cybercriminals are highly educated and skilled people. They are just misutilising their knowledge and literary skill. Nevertheless, most common forms of criminal activities such as robbery, killing, and molestation can surely be controlled to a significant extent by educating people. In conclusion, while education has been found effective in the prevention of typical offenses, some sophisticated crimes such as cybercrime, embezzlement may not be prevented as they are performed by well-educated individuals.
In a number of nations, it is common to
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prevent
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crimes
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some
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people
believe that it is better to educate
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people
to restrain them from committing offenses. I
largely
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agree
with the
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given
statement as effective literary
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skills
can
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prevent
motivation for typical offenses,
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but
they may fail to address certain
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crimes
such as online
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crimes
and hacking.

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First of all
, it is an ineffective
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education
which is responsible for unemployment. Without
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education
and knowledge, it is
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hard
to
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get
jobs.
Consequently
, these uneducated
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people
indulge in
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criminal
activities such as robbery and killing others for money. Had they received a
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good
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education
, they would
be employed
and need not resort to such illegal and immoral acts.

Secondly
,
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often
educated
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people
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live
in a community with other educated and productive
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people
. They share nice thoughts and work toward the
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positive
development of self
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and others
. When
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people
are engaged
in productive activities they
automatically
have no time to
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think
of
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criminal
acts or perform crimes.

Undoubtedly
, this is
also
true that not all
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crimes
can be
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prevented
by promising
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education
as
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some
of the most
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famous
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criminals
have been master's degree holders and working in reputed
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companies
in outstanding positions.
For example
, cybercriminals are
highly
educated and skilled
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people
. They are
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just
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misutilising
their knowledge and literary
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skill
.
Nevertheless
, most common forms of
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criminal
activities such as robbery, killing, and molestation can
surely
be controlled
to a significant extent by educating
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people
.

In conclusion
, while
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education
has
been found
effective in the prevention of typical offenses,
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some
sophisticated
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crimes
such as cybercrime, embezzlement may not be
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prevented
as they
are performed
by well-educated individuals.
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IELTS essay In many countries, prison is the most common solution for crimes. However, many think that better education is the most effective way to prevent from committing further crime.

Essay
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5 paragraphs
280 words
6.5
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