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IN MANY COUNTRIES MORE AND MORE YOUNG PEOPLE AND BECOMING JOBLESS. WHAT PROBLEM DO TOU THINK UNEMPLOYMENT WILL CAUSE TO INDIVIDUALS AND THE SOCIETY? WHAT MEASURES SHOULD BE TAKEN TO REDUCE THE LEVEL OF UNEMPLOYMENT AMOUNG YOUNGSTERS?

IN MANY COUNTRIES MORE AND MORE YOUNG PEOPLE AND BECOMING JOBLESS. WHAT PROBLEM DO TOU THINK UNEMPLOYMENT WILL CAUSE TO INDIVIDUALS AND THE SOCIETY? WHAT MEASURES SHOULD BE TAKEN TO REDUCE THE LEVEL OF UNEMPLOYMENT AMOUNG YOUNGSTERS? Kw88w
In current time, poverty is future of unemployment. Nowadays, unemployment rate is being increased in younger generation. in addition, it also affect adversely on development of country as well. This essay will argue about crux which will created bu unemployment and some solutions which can help to repress the count of unemployed young people. Unemployment creates many different problems for personaly and community which will finally reflact as hurdle for devlopment of country. First and formost problem is education for offspring without money people not ableto fulfill the necessary requirement of children's education. some times, parents areforced to there children to leave there education and start work for money. In many countries it is very common. Nevertheless, the path to increase employment is not simple. Government needs to enforce some schemes which help people to be employed. Government should organise job fair for unemployed people. Government provide loan to unemployed people on low interest rate which can help them to start business. Government should organise free education courses to educate unemployed people. In conclusion, unemployment in young people is very harmful for society and government should use there power to educate people and help to unemployed people to get job.
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unemployment
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unemployment
rate is
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in younger generation.
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in
addition, it
also
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affect
adversely
on development of country
as well
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unemployment
and
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some
solutions which can
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help
to repress the count of
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unemployed
young
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people
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Unemployment creates
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many
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different
problems for
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personaly
and community which will
finally
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reflact
as hurdle for
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devlopment
of country.
First
and
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formost
problem is
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education
for offspring without money
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people
not
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ableto
fulfill the necessary requirement of children's
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education
.
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some
times, parents
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areforced
to
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children to
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education
and
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start
work for money. In
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many
countries it is
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very
common.

Nevertheless
, the path to increase employment is not simple.
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Government
needs to enforce
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some
schemes which
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help
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people
to
be employed
.
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should
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organise
job
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fair
for
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unemployed
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people
.
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Government
provide loan to
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unemployed
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people
on low interest rate which can
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help
them to
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start
business.
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Government
should
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organise
free
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education
courses to educate
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unemployed
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people
.

In conclusion
,
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unemployment
in young
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people
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is
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very
harmful for society and
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government
should
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use
there power to educate
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people
and
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help
to
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unemployed
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people
to
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get
job.
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IELTS essay IN MANY COUNTRIES MORE AND MORE YOUNG PEOPLE AND BECOMING JOBLESS. WHAT PROBLEM DO TOU THINK UNEMPLOYMENT WILL CAUSE TO INDIVIDUALS AND THE SOCIETY? WHAT MEASURES SHOULD BE TAKEN TO REDUCE THE LEVEL OF UNEMPLOYMENT AMOUNG YOUNGSTERS?

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