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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. PVWN2
In many nations of the world, few individuals earn extraordinarily big salaries. While some think it is beneficial to the country, others believe that states should limit wages to a certain level. In my view, although earning extremely huge salaries by some individuals has an advantage of generating huge taxes for government, setting limits for attainable salaries is more beneficial as it reduces excesses. On the one hand, large amount of taxes are remmited to the goverment by a small number of workers in the society who receive fat salaries. Such individuals pay more taxes to government because of the policy that the more salaries earned by workers, the more taxes they pay. For instance, Medical practitioners are one of the highest paid professionals in the health sector, and the highest tax payers. However, when it is only few people that receives extraordinary wages, others might be discouraged from putting their best in what they do. On the other hand, setting control on the salaries individuals can receive has greater benefits as it curtails excesses that only a few are enjoying, and such is added to the wages of low-income salary earners. Also, the states can use some of the money to provide basic needs for the poor. For instance, the government of Nigeria recently cut the salaries of above level 14 workers, and used the money generated to provide a low cost housing scheme for workers below level 8. Nevertheless, this might reduce the tenacity at which workers at the managerial level discharge their duties. In conclusion, receiving outrageous wages by the few is not bad because government gets heavy duties in return. However, I believe that the government's setting up limitation for the highest salary level an individual can attain is better as this checks excesses and makes room for other low-income salary earners to benefit more. Comments:
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, setting limits for attainable
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is more beneficial as it
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that receives extraordinary wages, others might
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hand, setting control on the
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can receive has greater benefits as it curtails excesses that
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, the states can
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the money generated to provide a low cost housing scheme for
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at the managerial
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discharge their duties.

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's setting up limitation for the highest
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an
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can attain is better as this
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checks
excesses and
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room for
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other
low-income
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salary
earners to benefit more.

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IELTS essay In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level.

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