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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spend on improving existing public transport. Di cuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, numerous of countries are tending to contribute a portion of economics for building on traffic realm. It is true that a number of traffic problems should be solved and improved. A bone of contention remains on whether governments are supposed to assign money on constructing new rail way lines such as research fast trains through the cities or existing transport are more deserve improved. In this essay, I will discuss both of the opinions and express my personal perspective. No one can deny that nation are confronting with a variety of problems on existing public transport and therefore it is reasonable to put more effort on existing transportation improvement. Firstly, as widely known that raise public transport quality, which is extremely helpful for people to avoid traffic congestion instead of wasting time on the road or waiting for public transport for long time. Secondly, governments are enable to reduce traffic accidents as enhance public transport. What I mean is that there are a less traffic accidents will happen after improve quality of transportation. For example, people will not be annoyed by the public transports due to the fact that destroyed of quality issues. On the other hand, countries should impel the improvement progress, which means that we can not only concentrate on original researches of public transports. Meanwhile, countries should encourage to explore high technical railway lines like trains and subways. Thus, it will bring various benefit to the people. To start with, constructing faster transportation will more convenience to residents and it will not be time consuming to the society people. For instance, fast trains are helpful to multiple people who convenient go back to hometown for looking after their family. In addition, it is an excellent approach for the countries to leap economy. The reason is that latest transportation are usually more welcomed by citizens and thus countries can receive the money from it and meanwhile it may also attract travelers to experience new exploration and they may contribute money as they attempt it. In my opinion, although improve existing public transports can solve the problem of traffic congestion and avoid traffic accidents, I personally believe that build new trains are more convenience and high return.
Nowadays, numerous of
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countries
are tending to contribute a portion of economics for building on
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traffic
realm. It is true that a number of
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traffic
problems should
be solved
and
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improved
. A bone of contention remains on whether
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governments
are supposed
to assign money on constructing new
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rail way
lines such as research
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fast
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trains
through the cities or
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existing
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transport
are more deserve
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improved
. In this essay, I will discuss both of the opinions and express my personal perspective.

No one can deny that nation are confronting with a variety of problems on
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existing
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public
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transport
and
therefore
it is reasonable to put more effort on
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existing
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transportation
improvement.
Firstly
, as
widely
known that raise
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public
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transport
quality, which is
extremely
helpful for
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people
to avoid
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traffic
congestion
instead
of wasting time on the road or waiting for
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public
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transport
for long time.
Secondly
,
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governments
are
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enable
to
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reduce
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traffic
accidents as enhance
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public
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transport
. What I mean is that there are a less
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traffic
accidents will happen after
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improve
quality of
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transportation
.
For example
,
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people
will not
be annoyed
by the
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public
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transports
due to the fact that
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destroyed
of quality issues.

On the other hand
,
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countries
should impel the improvement progress, which means that we can not
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only
concentrate on original researches of
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public
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transports
. Meanwhile,
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countries
should encourage
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to explore
high technical railway lines like
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trains
and subways.
Thus
, it will bring various benefit to the
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people
. To
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start
with, constructing faster
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transportation
will more convenience to
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residents and
it will not be
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time consuming
to the society
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people
.
For instance
,
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fast
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trains
are helpful to multiple
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people
who convenient go back to hometown for looking after their family.
In addition
, it is an excellent approach for the
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countries
to leap economy. The reason is that latest
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transportation
are
usually
more welcomed by citizens and
thus
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countries
can receive the money from it and meanwhile it may
also
attract travelers to experience new
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exploration and
they may contribute money as they attempt it.

In my opinion, although
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improve
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existing
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public
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transports
can solve the problem of
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traffic
congestion and avoid
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traffic
accidents, I
personally
believe that build new
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trains
are more convenience and high return.
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IELTS essay In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spend on improving existing public transport. Di cuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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