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Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations.

Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. Some say that the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. In my opinion, the aid of wealthy countries is imperative to fight poverty in developing nations. Today’s world has been divided into developing and industrialised countries which the main difference between them is the amount of money that governments apply in important sectors such as education, health and commerce. Most of the poorer nations are buried in debts as a result of their unbalanced finances which are reflect in a failed health care, an unstructured education system and a weak international trade. This vicious cycle will continue indefinitely unless wealthier nations show interest in minimizing the worldwide economic differences, as well as taking more responsibility for assisting less fortunate countriesImprovements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. Some say that the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. In my opinion, the aid of wealthy countries is imperative to fight poverty in developing nations. Today’s world has been divided into developing and industrialised countries which the main difference between them is the amount of money that governments apply in important sectors such as education, health and commerce. Most of the poorer nations are buried in debts as a result of their unbalanced finances which are reflect in a failed health care, an unstructured education system and a weak international trade. This vicious cycle will continue indefinitely unless wealthier nations show interest in minimizing the worldwide economic differences, as well as taking more responsibility for assisting less fortunate countries
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are essential for the development of
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poorer
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say that the
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governments
of richer
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nations
should take more
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responsibility
for helping the
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poorer
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nations
in such areas. In my opinion, the aid of wealthy
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countries
is imperative to fight poverty in
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developing
nations.

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Today
’s world has
been divided
into
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developing
and
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industrialised
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countries
which the main
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difference
between them is the amount of money that
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governments
apply in
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important
sectors such as
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education
,
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health
and commerce. Most of the
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poorer
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nations
are buried
in debts
as a result
of their unbalanced finances which are
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reflect
in a failed
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health
care, an unstructured
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education
system and a weak international
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trade
. This vicious cycle will continue
indefinitely
unless wealthier
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nations
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show
interest in minimizing the worldwide economic
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differences
,
as well
as taking more
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responsibility
for assisting less fortunate
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countriesImprovements
in
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health
,
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education
and
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trade
are essential for the development of
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poorer
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nations
.
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Some
say that the
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governments
of richer
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nations
should take more
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responsibility
for helping the
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poorer
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nations
in such areas. In my opinion, the aid of wealthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
is imperative to fight poverty in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
developing
nations.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Today
’s world has
been divided
into
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developing
and
Possible spelling mistake. ‘industrialised’ is British English.
industrialised
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countries
which the main
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difference
between them is the amount of money that
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governments
apply in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
sectors such as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
and commerce. Most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
poorer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
are buried
in debts
as a result
of their unbalanced finances which are
Consider using either the past participle “reflected” or the present participle “reflecting” here.
reflect
in a failed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
care, an unstructured
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
system and a weak international
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trade
. This vicious cycle will continue
indefinitely
unless wealthier
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
interest in minimizing the worldwide economic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
differences
,
as well
as taking more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
responsibility
for assisting less fortunate
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countries
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IELTS essay Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
286 words
5.5
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