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Immigration to another country

Immigration to another country LBOR6
June 3, 2013 Today is the biggest day of my life, me and my family are going to Canada. It's very tough leaving India, I have so many friends, relatives and other family members living here. All my good times are going to become memories, but I am happy that we are going to start a new life. There are so many questions going in my mind like, will I be treated fairly? Is it going to be an easy life like it was in India? Will I make new friends and am I going to be in a different grade or stay in grade 1? I also wonder how school is, are teachers welcoming and nice? I have no idea what will happen but I'm hoping it will be good.
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a new life. There are
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so
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questions going in my mind like, will I
be treated
fairly
? Is it going to be an easy life like it was in India? Will I
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make
new friends and am I going to be in a
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grade or stay in grade 1? I
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wonder how school is, are teachers welcoming and nice? I have no
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what will happen
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I'm hoping it will be
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IELTS essay Immigration to another country

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
131 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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