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how ever you are be your self

how ever you are be your self 3MnEm
Derek, instead, took and extra beating for not being man enough to face his own problems. "Are you really that stupid to never learn anything from me? Never delegate, if you want something done right, do it yourself! " Derek had never felt so helpless and desperate, so that night he bawled his eyes out, until he fell asleep. That had been the last straw. The next day he felt different, clearheaded like never before. It was not the time for despair anymore, he needed a plan. It would take him years to realize that something inside him had died. He was no longer able to trust, hope or develop any sense of kinship. He was surrounded by enemies, and to survive Derek needed to be able to fight back.
Derek,
instead
, took and extra beating for not being
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man
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enough
to face his
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own
problems.

Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
Are you
really
that stupid to never learn anything from me? Never delegate, if you want something done right, do it yourself!
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"


Derek had never felt
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so
helpless and desperate,
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so
that night he bawled his eyes out, until he fell asleep. That had been the last straw.

The
next
day he felt
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different
, clearheaded like never
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before
. It was not the time for despair anymore, he needed a plan.

It would take him years to realize that something inside him had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
died
. He was no longer able to trust, hope or develop any sense of kinship. He
was surrounded
by enemies, and to survive Derek needed to be able to fight back.

IELTS essay how ever you are be your self

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
130 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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