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How ancient Egyptians were able to bring rocks and other building materials to construction sites has been gaining evidence But the question of how they lifted massive rocks to build the pyramid is still unsolved leaving rooms for theories to be suggested

How ancient Egyptians were able to bring rocks and other building materials to construction sites has been gaining evidence But the question of how they lifted massive rocks to build the pyramid is still unsolved leaving rooms for theories to be suggested 3agYN
The given passage emphasizes on how the pyramid is built by ancient Egyptians especially how they lift those massive rocks. The author of the passage mentions three possible explanations which are refuted by the lecturer by using its own reasons and evidence. The first point that lecturer makes is about the external ramps which according to the passage, were used to reduce the amount of time and labour needed to carry materials. However, the lecturer refutes this point stating that even if the ancient Egyptians have used ramps to carry rocks it would still be difficult to move them near at the higher levels of the pyramid with increased inclination. The lecturer also points out that in case of spiral and zigzagging ramps the turning the rocks at corners will still be a problem. The second theory mentioned in the passage is, ancient Egyptians might have used internal ramps with notches at each corner for easier change of direction while pulling rocks. This theory is turned down by the lecturer saying that there is no evidence of internal ramping, And this speculation is completely based on computer simulation. To verify this theory one must go inside the pyramid which no one ever did. Also, the lecturer casts doubt about the existence of spiral and zigzagging ramps during that time. Lastly, the passage states the theory of limestone where they might have moulded the pyramid at the first place. Lecturer contradicts this theory stating that it doesn't explain how they got the pyramid faces perfectly at the top and also points out that with stone tools of their time it is very difficult to achieve such a level of perfection in such a less time. In this way, the passage explains three different theories about pyramid construction and the lecturer opposes to all of them using his evidence and reasons.
The
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given
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passage
emphasizes on how the
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pyramid
is built
by ancient Egyptians
especially
how they lift those massive
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rocks
. The author of the
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passage
mentions three possible explanations which
are refuted
by the
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lecturer
by using its
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own
reasons and evidence.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
first
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point
that
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lecturer
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makes
is about the external
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ramps
which according to the
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passage
, were
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used
to
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reduce
the amount of time and
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labour
needed to carry materials.
However
, the
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lecturer
refutes this
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point
stating that even if the ancient Egyptians have
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used
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ramps
to carry
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rocks
it would
still
be difficult to
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move
them near at the higher levels of the
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pyramid
with increased inclination. The
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lecturer
also
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points
out that in case of spiral and zigzagging
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ramps
the turning the
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rocks
at corners will
still
be a problem.

The second
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theory
mentioned in the
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passage
is, ancient Egyptians might have
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used
internal
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ramps
with notches at each corner for easier
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change
of direction while pulling
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rocks
. This
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theory
is turned
down by the
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lecturer
saying that there is no evidence of internal ramping, And this speculation is completely based on computer simulation. To verify this
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theory
one
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must
go inside the
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pyramid
which no one ever did.
Also
, the
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lecturer
casts doubt about the existence of spiral and zigzagging
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ramps
during that time.

Lastly
, the
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passage
states the
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theory
of limestone where they might have
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moulded
the
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pyramid
at the
first
place.
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Lecturer
contradicts this
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theory
stating that it doesn't
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explain
how they
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got
the
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pyramid
faces
perfectly
at the top and
also
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points
out that with stone tools of their time it is
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very
difficult to achieve such a level of perfection in such a less time.

In this way, the
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passage
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explains
three
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different
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theories
about
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pyramid
construction and the
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lecturer
opposes to all of them using his evidence and reasons.
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IELTS essay How ancient Egyptians were able to bring rocks and other building materials to construction sites has been gaining evidence But the question of how they lifted massive rocks to build the pyramid is still unsolved leaving rooms for theories to be suggested

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
309 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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