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Full time University students spend most of the time studying . They should be doing activities too. To waht extemt do you agree or disagree.

Full time University students spend most of the time studying. They should be doing activities too. To waht extemt LAqV
Education plays prominent role in everyone's life. It is argued that in the contemporary era, university pupils can expand quality time on study. However, they should be pay attention on other activities with study. I agree with this given statement and I intend to putforth my personal stand viewpoint in upcoming paragraphs. To embark on, there are several reasons why they should prefer another activities. First and foremost, if learners would spend more time on study, they can face plenty of problems regarding health. They become couch patato. As a result, pupils who invest more time on education are not active and usually they have sedentary lifestyles. To exemplify, some students can sucide because of worst dipression in their mind while in study. Beside this, students do not learn social skills until when they do not spend time with friends and events also. Therefore, they sough be doing other activities for self enjoyment. To eleborate the other ideas, they ought to be squander time on another activities. If they will expend the time on owmn choices activities, they will more rejuvinate. For instance, they do not feel burden of study by participating a sports activities. They may bring the social skills such as team work, leadership and patience also. Apart from this, they would achieved the desire goals without any study pressure. On the contrary, they do not forget their first priority of study with other activities. In conclusion, after analysing the whole writing it can be reiterate that although other activities play vital role in students life, but yet they should be concertration on study for better future.
Education plays prominent role in everyone's life. It
is argued
that in the contemporary era, university pupils can expand quality
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time
on
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study
.
However
, they should be pay attention on
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other
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activities
with
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study
. I
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agree
with this
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given
statement and I intend to
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putforth
my personal stand viewpoint in upcoming paragraphs. To embark on, there are several reasons why they should prefer another
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activities
.
First
and foremost, if learners would spend more
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time
on
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study
, they can face
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plenty
of problems regarding health. They become couch
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patato
.
As a result
, pupils who invest more
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time
on education are not active and
usually
they have sedentary lifestyles. To exemplify,
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some
students can
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sucide
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because
of worst
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dipression
in their mind while in
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study
. Beside this, students do not learn social
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skills
until when they do not spend
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time
with friends and
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events
also
.
Therefore
, they sough be doing
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other
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activities
for self enjoyment. To
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eleborate
the
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other
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ideas
, they ought to be
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squander
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time
on another
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activities
. If they
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will expend
the
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time
on
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owmn
choices
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activities
, they will more
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rejuvinate
.
For instance
, they do not feel burden of
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study
by participating a sports
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activities
. They may bring the social
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skills
such as team work, leadership and patience
also
. Apart from this, they would
The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: "achieve"
achieved
the desire goals without any
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study
pressure.
On the contrary
, they do not forget their
first
priority of
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study
with
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other
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activities
.
In conclusion
, after
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analysing
the whole writing it can be
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reiterate
that although
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other
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activities
play vital role in students life,
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but
yet
they should be
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concertration
on
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study
for better future.
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IELTS essay Full time University students spend most of the time studying. They should be doing activities too. To waht extemt

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5.5
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