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Fossil evidence indicates that the blompus-an extremely large, carnivorous land mammal-inhabited the continent of Pentagoria for tens of thousands of years until its sudden decline and ultimate extinction about twelve thousand years ago. Scientists have d

Fossil evidence indicates that the blompus-an extremely large, carnivorous land mammal-inhabited the continent of Pentagoria for tens of thousands of years until its sudden decline and ultimate extinction about twelve thousand years ago. Scientists have d yXgGg
Follow the statement, the author asserts that there is two plausible conclusions for the decline of the blompus population which is an extremely large land mammal has been extinct from this world for 12 thousand years. At first glance, It is likely to rational with the event occurred at that time. However, it is not entirely logically convincing because it ignores some certain crucial assumptions. First and foremost is, the author omits to elaborate on the intrinsic characteristics of the blompus as an animal itself. Was it cold blooded or warm blooded? Was it living in comparatively tropical topography or was it, in fact, an inhabitant of Arctic poles? The information presented above is not enough to relate the further theories that have been presented as a viable explanation to the extinction of blompus since the paragraph providing lack of the major characteristic associated with blompus itself. Secondly and quite obviously, the first argument presented by the scholars taking consideration into the extinction of blompus as a result of sudden climate change overlooks that climate change may not have indeed unfavorable for the blompus itself. We are unaware of the fact that what kind of a climate change at that place and we can not make sure whether these climate changes have had any effect on blompus or not. And in some cases, there is still the situation that the blompus could adapt to climate change in quite an appealing fashion. Similarly, the author unambiguously establishes that the blompus was a carnivorous mammal so scientists imagining that plants disruption would have resulted in less food for blompus is scientifically incorrect. The argument itself is unable to present any evidence of what kind of animals they were dependent upon or whether the reproduction of those animals exacerbated or augmented as a result of the climate change. In addition to that, the second argument devised by the theorists about the blompus was in the food chain of human, nevertheless, it still contains many irrational factors which need filling before we proceed with establishing it as a prudent reason for blompus's extinction. There is a huge lack of evidence as if blompus was edible or not? What were the eating habits of the human then? Were they sharing the same topography with blompus or not? Was blompus, a perilous animal to hunt or was readily available for hunting? Could blompus have been used for any other human habit-say transportation? If the author had provided answers to the following questions, it second argument might have had firmer grounds to complement itself as a plausible explanation for the extinction of blompus. While there is some useful information stipulated by the author as for blompus extinction, it cannot be inferred from the passage that the arguments or rather hypothesis it presents could serve as a pragmatic foundation for explaining the extinction of blompus. Hence we cannot fully rely on the predictions presented in the passage.
Follow the statement, the
author
asserts that there is two plausible conclusions for the decline of the
blompus
population which is an
extremely
large land mammal has been extinct from this world for 12 thousand years. At
first
glance, It is likely
to
rational with the
event
occurred at that time.
However
, it is not
entirely
logically
convincing
because
it
ignores
some
certain crucial assumptions.

First
and foremost is, the
author
omits to elaborate on the intrinsic characteristics of the
blompus
as an
animal
itself. Was it
cold blooded
or warm blooded? Was it living in
comparatively
tropical topography or was it, in fact, an inhabitant of Arctic poles? The information
presented
above is not
enough
to relate the
further
theories that have been
presented
as a viable explanation to the
extinction
of
blompus
since the paragraph providing lack of the major characteristic associated with
blompus
itself.

Secondly
and quite
obviously
, the
first
argument
presented
by the scholars taking consideration into the
extinction
of
blompus
as a result
of sudden
climate
change
overlooks that
climate
change
may not have
indeed
unfavorable for the
blompus
itself. We are unaware of the fact that what
kind of a
climate
change
at that
place and
we can not
make
sure whether these
climate
changes
have had any effect on
blompus
or not. And in
some
cases, there is
still
the situation that the
blompus
could adapt to
climate
change
in quite an appealing fashion.

Similarly
, the
author
unambiguously
establishes that the
blompus
was a carnivorous mammal
so
scientists imagining that plants disruption would have resulted in less food for
blompus
is
scientifically
incorrect. The
argument
itself is unable to present any evidence of what kind of
animals
they were dependent upon or whether the reproduction of those
animals
exacerbated or augmented
as a result
of the
climate
change
.

In addition
to that, the second
argument
devised by the theorists about the
blompus
was in the food chain of human,
nevertheless
, it
still
contains
many
irrational factors which need filling
before
we proceed with establishing it as a prudent reason for
blompus
's
extinction
. There is a huge lack of evidence as if
blompus
was edible or not? What were the eating habits of the human then? Were they sharing the same topography with
blompus
or not? Was
blompus
, a perilous
animal
to hunt or was
readily
available for hunting? Could
blompus
have been
used
for any other human habit-say transportation? If the
author
had provided answers to the following questions, it
second
argument
might have had firmer grounds to complement itself as a plausible explanation for the
extinction
of
blompus
.

While there is
some
useful information stipulated by the
author
as for
blompus
extinction
, it cannot
be inferred
from the passage that the
arguments
or
rather
hypothesis it presents could serve as a pragmatic foundation for explaining the
extinction
of
blompus
.
Hence
we cannot
fully
rely on the predictions
presented
in the passage.
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IELTS essay Fossil evidence indicates that the blompus-an extremely large, carnivorous land mammal-inhabited the continent of Pentagoria for tens of thousands of years until its sudden decline and ultimate extinction about twelve thousand years ago. Scientists have d

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