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Forests produce fresh oxygen and participate in regulating climate. But every year tree cover of our planet is lessening due to deforestation. What are the primary causes of deforestation? To what results may it lead?

Forests produce fresh oxygen and participate in regulating climate. But every year tree cover of our planet is lessening due to deforestation. What are the primary causes of deforestation? To what results may it lead? gkAd
Human beings cannot sustain for a few seconds without oxygen and it is a well-known fact that plants and trees are the primary sources that are responsible for generating the O2 in the atmosphere. Despite this dependency on forests, people still don’t restrain themselves from cutting them down. Homo sapiens have been carrying out deforestation for many years due to various reasons, which later on lead to some adverse impacts on the biosphere. The following passage illustrates the primary causes of deforestation and the results it leads to. To begin with, one of the main causes of deforestation is the need for agricultural land, in order to produce greater quantities of food crops. In addition to this, for the sake of providing better transportation and living conditions, governments started logging trees owing to the fact that construction of buildings, roads, railways and setting up electric beams among the woods is not suitable. Lastly, the wood that is obtained from the trees is used for various purposes such as, it is used as fuel for vehicles, it is carved and used to produce furniture. For instance, the forest area has been reduced significantly over the past few decades due to the fact of an increasing number of buildings and roads. Firstly, the most important effect of clearing forests is global warming which not only increases the temperature of the biosphere but also severely impacts the water cycle. Secondly, the loss of natural habitat, considering the fact that the jungle is the adobe of wildlife. For example, as a consequence of this situation, there are a greater number of wild animals which are on verge of extinction such as rhinoceros, Bengal tiger. In conclusion, people should realise and understand the negative outcomes of deforestation and must take required measures such as encouraging afforestation.
Human beings cannot sustain for a few seconds without oxygen and it is a well-known
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fact
that plants and trees are the primary sources that are responsible for generating the O2 in the atmosphere. Despite this dependency on forests,
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people
still
don’t restrain themselves from cutting them down.

Homo sapiens have been carrying out
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deforestation
for
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many
years due to various reasons, which later on lead to
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some
adverse impacts on the biosphere. The following passage illustrates the primary causes of
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deforestation
and the results it leads to.

To
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begin
with, one of the main causes of
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deforestation
is the need for agricultural land, in order to produce greater quantities of food crops.
In addition
to this, for the sake of providing better transportation and living conditions,
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governments
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started
logging trees owing to the
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fact
that construction of buildings, roads, railways and setting up electric beams among the woods is not suitable.
Lastly
, the wood that
is obtained
from the trees is
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used
for various purposes such as, it is
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used
as fuel for vehicles, it
is carved
and
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used
to produce furniture.
For instance
, the forest area has been
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reduced
significantly
over the past few decades due to the
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fact
of an increasing number of buildings and roads.

Firstly
, the most
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important
effect of clearing forests is global warming which not
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only
increases the temperature of the biosphere
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but
also
severely
impacts the water cycle.
Secondly
, the loss of natural habitat, considering the
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fact
that the jungle is the adobe of wildlife.
For example
, as a consequence of this situation, there are a greater number of wild animals which are on verge of extinction such as rhinoceros, Bengal tiger.

In conclusion
,
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people
should
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realise
and understand the
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negative
outcomes of
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deforestation
and
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must
take required measures such as encouraging afforestation.
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IELTS essay Forests produce fresh oxygen and participate in regulating climate. But every year tree cover of our planet is lessening due to deforestation. What are the primary causes of deforestation? To what results may it lead?

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5 paragraphs
301 words
6.5
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