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Family work and children. Support children from theeir parents.

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In the past, a typical family consisted of a father who went out to work and a mother who stayed at home and looked after the children. Nowadays, it is the norm for both parents to work. This situation can affect children both positively and negatively. Some people think that the children of working parents are in an advantages position were their parents are able to afford more luxuries such as new clothes, video games or mobile phones. Proponents of this view argue that children are able to enjoy and experience more from life due their parents’ extra wealth, for example, by going foreign holidays. On the other hand, however, there are those who claim that when both parents work, their children do not get enough support and attention; meaning that these children might not do as well at school because there is no one at home to provide support with such things as homework or exam revision. The absence of parents at home could make it easier for children to get involved in such things as drugs or underage drinking. When I was growing up, both my parents worked and I was always well provided for. On the other hand, I think that it would sometimes have been better if I could have seen more of my parents. In conclusion, I believe that we cannot change the fact that both parents have to work nowadays, It is not an ideal situation, but if parents make time for their children in the evenings and at the weekends, then the children will not suffer in any way. It must be stated that the extra income generated by both parents working, makes for a much higher standard of living which benefits the whole family.
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work
and a mother who stayed at home and looked after the
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children
. Nowadays, it is the norm for both
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parents
to
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work
. This situation can affect
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children
both
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people
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children
of working
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are in an advantages position
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were
their
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are able to afford more luxuries such as new clothes, video games or mobile phones. Proponents of this view argue that
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children
are able to enjoy and experience more from life due their
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parents’
extra wealth,
for example
, by going foreign holidays.

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, there are those who claim that when both
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parents
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work
, their
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do not
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support and attention; meaning that these
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might not do
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at school
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because
there is no one at home to provide support with such things as homework or exam revision. The absence of
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parents
at home could
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make
it easier for
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to
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involved in such things as drugs or underage drinking.

When I was growing up, both my
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worked and
I was always well provided for.
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have been better if I could have
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seen
more of my parents.

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the fact that both
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nowadays, It is not an ideal situation,
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if
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make
time for their
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children
in the evenings and at the weekends, then the
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children
will not suffer in any way. It
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must
be stated
that the extra income generated by both
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working,
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makes
for a much higher standard of living which benefits the whole family.
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IELTS essay Family work and children. Support children from theeir parents.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
292 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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