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Experts throughout both the developing and developed world have debated whether the advent of sophisticated modern technology such as mobile phones, laptops and iPad have helped to enhance and improve people’s social lives or whether the opposite has become the case.

Experts throughout both the developing and developed world have debated whether the advent of sophisticated modern technology such as mobile phones, laptops and iPad have helped to enhance and improve people’s social lives or whether the opposite has become the case. Personally, I strongly advocate the former view. This essay will discuss both sides using examples from the UK government and Oxford University to demonstrate points and prove arguments. On the one hand there is ample, powerful, almost daily evidence that such technology can be detrimental especially to the younger generation who are more easily affected by it’s addictive nature and which can result in people feeling more isolated from the society. The central reason behind this is twofold, firstly, the invention of online social media sites and apps, such as Twitter and Facebook have reduced crucial face-to-face interactions dramatically. Through use of these appealing and attractive mediums, people feel in touch and connected yet lack key social skills and the ability to communicate. From the arguments and examples given I firmly believe that overall communication and mans’ sociability has been advanced enormously due to huge the huge technological progress of the past twenty years and despite some potentially serious health implications which governments should not fail to address, it is predicted that its popularity will continue to flourish in the future.
Experts throughout both the developing and developed world have debated whether the advent of sophisticated modern technology such as mobile phones, laptops and iPad have
helped
to enhance and
improve
people
’s social
lives
or whether the opposite has become the case.
Personally
, I
strongly
advocate the former view. This essay will discuss both sides using examples from the UK
government
and Oxford University to demonstrate points and prove arguments.

On the one hand there is ample, powerful, almost daily evidence that such technology can be detrimental
especially
to the younger generation who are more
easily
affected
by
it’s
addictive nature and which can result in
people
feeling more isolated from the society. The central reason behind this is twofold,
firstly
, the invention of online social media sites and apps, such as Twitter and Facebook have
reduced
crucial face-to-face interactions
dramatically
. Through
use
of these appealing and attractive mediums,
people
feel in touch and connected
yet
lack key social
skills
and the ability to communicate.

From the arguments and examples
given
I
firmly
believe that
overall
communication and
mans
’ sociability has
been advanced
enormously
due to huge the huge technological progress of the past twenty years and despite
some
potentially
serious health implications which
governments
should not fail to address, it
is predicted
that its popularity will continue to flourish in the future.
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IELTS essay Experts throughout both the developing and developed world have debated whether the advent of sophisticated modern technology such as mobile phones, laptops and iPad have helped to enhance and improve people’s social lives or whether the opposite has become the case.

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