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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. RMQ8
It has always been scripturient for me to describe on the health service. Health is defined as a matter of mental and physical well being. When this health is being distroted, then health service intervenes to restore it to normal. This service has become commerical in the recent times and there are several issues being raised on its availability to the public. This essay will shed light on the topic health service and its availability to all, in the upcoming paragraph. Firstly, due to its essential requirement, the new techonogy is being updated day to day to meet the new challenges everyday. As new technology keeps emerging in the world, the cost for these devices becomes increasingly high. Therefore, due to this high price people of the middle and lower class are being affected and will not be able to acquire proper treatement. Another reason is that, getting qualified personnel for health service job is hard. Due to its tedious and tough process for qualified personnel. However, due to this hard process, the salary for them has also been set high. This has made the label price high on the products provided by the health service. Overall, issues such as the evolving technology and maintenance cost has made the health service expensive due to its demand to meet it's quality standard. In my personal opinion, I would strongly disagree with the statments mentioned above. The health service has become expensive due to privatisation, every country government has the enough funding to maintain the health service in the country. If, the government could bear the subsidy cost and allow the people to pay the remaining cost for the service consumed by them, then both the parties will be benefited.
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scripturient
for me to
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describe
on the
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health
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service
.
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Health
is defined
as a matter of mental and physical
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well being
. When this
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health
is being
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distroted
, then
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health
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service
intervenes to restore it to normal. This
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service
has become
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commerical
in the recent times and there are several issues
being raised
on its availability to the public. This essay will shed light on the topic
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health
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service
and its availability to all, in the upcoming paragraph.

Firstly
,
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due
to its essential requirement, the new
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techonogy
is
being updated
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day to day to
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meet
the new challenges
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everyday
. As new technology
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keeps
emerging in the world, the
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cost
for these devices becomes
increasingly
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high
.
Therefore
,
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due
to this
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high
price
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people
of the middle and lower
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class
are being
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affected
and will not be able to acquire proper
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treatement
.

Another reason is that, getting qualified personnel for
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health
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service
job is
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hard
.
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Due
to its tedious and tough process for qualified personnel.
However
,
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due
to this
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hard
process, the salary for them has
also
been set
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high
. This has made the label price
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high
on the products provided by the
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health
service.

Overall
, issues such as the evolving technology and maintenance
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cost
has made the
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health
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service
expensive
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due
to its demand to
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meet
it's quality standard. In my personal opinion, I would
strongly
disagree with the
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statments
mentioned above. The
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health
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service
has become expensive
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due
to
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privatisation
, every country
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government
has the
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enough
funding to maintain the
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health
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service
in the country. If, the
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government
could bear the subsidy
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cost
and
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allow
the
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people
to pay the remaining
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cost
for the
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service
consumed by them, then both the parties will
be benefited
.
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IELTS essay Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
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